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- Feb 6, 2021
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here's the thing, your chapters are long and very difficult to read. I'm usually reading on phone and my screen can't even fit two of your paragraphs together. just that is extremely off-putting. now add to that being greeted by constant walls of info dumps, I can't say I'm the least bit impressed. I only read a single chapter, and honestly, I skipped everything but the dialogue.It's been a while since the last time I got feedback. I would love it if you take a look at my story. Link in my signature.
right now I have 2 choices: I could give you a very poor, unreliable (even by my standards) rating, or invest a tremendous amount of effort trying to read through this.
And I'm going to do neither.
try experimenting with this site a bit. I've personally found it useful before