Chaaruzu_Corner
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Looking at the thing with squinted eyes, I shout. "What the hell is that?!" with disgust I covered my lips as I almost felt my lunch coming out of me. [It's...it's... I cannot believe what I saw.] I open my mouth once more and screamed. "A loli!" pointing at the thing. "It's a real life loli!" I shouted once more.
That is my writing style. I like putting detailed explanations on dialogues, with also my thought bubbles to form well, a detailed paragraph. There's 3 parts in this.
The regular narration, with no barriers on the start and end of a sentence. This is where the main character or a 3rd voice narrates, normal stuff.
The quotes "" this is the dialogue thing, it conveys the spoken words on the characters.
Finally the thought bubbles, [] with italics. This is where the thoughts of the characters in story thinks. But the thing is, I don't like 3rd person povs and so I use 1st person instead. So the regular narration and thought narration is from the same person. It's a bit confusing but I'll summarize it. Regular narration speaks to you the reader while the narration speaks within the story, so even if the regular narration and thought bubbles are from the same person, you would know that the thought bubbles are the pov thinking within the story itself and regular narration is that same pov explaining the story to you.
I dunno why I made a writing system so confusing but yeah I've gotten the hang of writing like this it's practically instinct. But well here's another example.
[That loli is real...] even though she's in her mid thirties it is indeed true that her height is like that of a grade school.
The main reason I write like this is that within the story it really is weird if the characters are describing in their heads a detailed explanation of a character just for you. So I separated the two functions so you would get the readers narrative of describing and explaining without the character actually thinking all of that within the story xD
So yeah, what do you think of it? I think it's good for small moments but if the story speeds up it would be difficult. But I wanna know what your opinion of it is :3
Alrighty, after that long ass explanation I deserve a self aware plug xD https://www.scribblehub.com/series/24213/black-witch-from-another-world/
And ye my current writing style is on the latest chapters so in the earlier ones you may find something different :P
That is my writing style. I like putting detailed explanations on dialogues, with also my thought bubbles to form well, a detailed paragraph. There's 3 parts in this.
The regular narration, with no barriers on the start and end of a sentence. This is where the main character or a 3rd voice narrates, normal stuff.
The quotes "" this is the dialogue thing, it conveys the spoken words on the characters.
Finally the thought bubbles, [] with italics. This is where the thoughts of the characters in story thinks. But the thing is, I don't like 3rd person povs and so I use 1st person instead. So the regular narration and thought narration is from the same person. It's a bit confusing but I'll summarize it. Regular narration speaks to you the reader while the narration speaks within the story, so even if the regular narration and thought bubbles are from the same person, you would know that the thought bubbles are the pov thinking within the story itself and regular narration is that same pov explaining the story to you.
I dunno why I made a writing system so confusing but yeah I've gotten the hang of writing like this it's practically instinct. But well here's another example.
[That loli is real...] even though she's in her mid thirties it is indeed true that her height is like that of a grade school.
The main reason I write like this is that within the story it really is weird if the characters are describing in their heads a detailed explanation of a character just for you. So I separated the two functions so you would get the readers narrative of describing and explaining without the character actually thinking all of that within the story xD
So yeah, what do you think of it? I think it's good for small moments but if the story speeds up it would be difficult. But I wanna know what your opinion of it is :3
Alrighty, after that long ass explanation I deserve a self aware plug xD https://www.scribblehub.com/series/24213/black-witch-from-another-world/
And ye my current writing style is on the latest chapters so in the earlier ones you may find something different :P