Chapter 8 has been completely rewritten! This one was pretty hard as I wanted to address some of the criticism, and ended up writing new scenes from scratch. Hopefully, you'll like it!
I'll leave the link below if you wish to take a look!
Chapter 6 has been completely rewritten! Cropped almost 600 words out of it, and streamlined the dialogue a lot. Now it should read much better! I'll leave the link below if you wish to take a look!