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I just read the prologue of Devil's Despair and noticed that for the dialogue when you had something after it you always used the names of the character. Instead of using I for the point of view, or he for the other person, you used the names instead.
I just read the prologue of Devil's Despair and noticed that for the dialogue when you had something after it you always used the names of the character. Instead of using I for the point of view, or he for the other person, you used the names instead.