Recent content by Bronzeapollo

I actually don't have children, this story mostly stems from the fact of me reminiscing about stories that exist for the sole purpose of happy escapism.

Hello and welcome to me shamelessly asking for criticisms of my new story, Meet Luna, my Daughter. It is a simple story with little plot twists and contrivances as it is meant to revolve around the lives of Luna and Aster. I always feel the chapters are missing something, a sentimentality that...

Reminds me of an old story I scrapped where whenever the character slept he forgot everything. He knew of his illness but never found a way to fix it. He would push off sleep and then leave because he didn't want to face people after having forgotten all of them. Eventually, the story started...

I hate my writing, but I use it as fuel to be better and to constantly be improving my style and genre. My own professor stated, '...Your line saying this inadequate is complete bullshit.' My editor messaging constantly over the last year asking for more story chapters. I can't find the same...

I will start with my story of "How he became God by doing nothing." as it is my most prolific comedy. However, this is satirical comedy and not comedy as a whole. I don't ever stop writing and die of laughter but smiling the entire time. The comedy is found in the fact the story is open to its...

A death flag is situational and even genre-based. Here is how the overly cliched death flag, "Let's go for a drink after this battle." Can be used and still confuse readers. Every reader in the world the character who said this will die. So use that to your advantage for the storytelling. What...

*Details omitted for the sake of Narrator not murdering Main Character*

The abyss is dark and daunting but it offers a form of comfort that pulls you in. While the light is burning, it's tiring to always stand in the spotlight, to be the person of reverence. Light wishes for you to be your best man, while Darkness desires torpidity. Light is inherently pushing you...

"The idea of time travel, fantasy. The idea of transferring ourselves through time in any sort of way is nigh. Even less so that we can control where we would land, that would be up to fate. Even then what is to say the world is worth changing? What does changing the world do? You wouldn’t be...

That is pretty much to my own dismay this whole account. I have a habit starting the stories but I lost motivation to continue them. But even then there are stories that I don't bring myself to write the first chapter to. Here are a few that I have openly accessible, "I just wanted a normal...

This is where our story truly begins. [The God of the Realm is sad.] Why are you sad now? I didn’t even make fun of Ziph that much this chapter. [The God of the Realm is already out of popcorn.] I swear you are just as bad as Ziph.

Much better than your first one! Keep practicing with the style and you will get better and better every time :D Glad my suggestions could help!

If I were to judge the blurb on its own, it's very generic. Which isn't a bad thing, more of a neutral thing. People who were interested in the story, to begin with, will still be interested and those who weren't likely still won't. So I would personally suggest something shorter. The...

I understand that overall, just feels to be missing something to me. I don't see how it can bring feeling, maybe connection but I wouldn't know. I feel if the story had any form of thematic idea the feeling possibly invoked would be stronger. Thanks for the encouragement though :D

Not looking to empose on my usual beta reader, who is studying for exams; however, I'm still curious for what I did wrong. The story is, This Story includes a Depressed Main Character. Summary: I’m already dead, and the story hasn’t even started. Thanks to anyone who offers feedback or even...