A good reference of this is shigure from Fruits Basket, if you wanted to see one.
The whole time he was working towards his own goals, but managed to play the role of caring guardian for the three children living in his house.
I think what makes a good twoface manipulator is the fact that...
You're right about that! My intent was to make it so that her rapid flying would confuse her opponent, I'll change it to "With a flap of her wings, Brier flew in every direction possible to distract her opponent, as she readied her crossbows and imbued them with her magic."
As for the second...
Oh I'll change the synopsis then. I just thought it would fun try to something newish. Since I found just a plot summary to be kind of boringish. Of course it has nothing to do with the story, I was just tinkering with an idea. Yea the synopsis is not heavily as edited as the chapters for sure...
Honestly I concur, first chapters do tend to be dicey, if you're just writing blindly. Try to sit down and map out the plot so you never derail. For myself I wrote the first chapter, then I was like wow this first chapter is kinda boring. So i went back and wrote a prologue to lead into the...
I will attach the link to the story here https://www.scribblehub.com/series/25085/taken-hostage-by-an-angel/.
I am used to constructive criticism, so please don't sugar coat words or be gentle. I would love to be judged fairly and impartially,
So that I can improve as a writer. I feel like the...