Recent content by JayDirex

I liked it immediately. Sorry I don't have more feedback. ❤️

I'll give you a discussion Paul :blob_reach: If the isolation of the character is a truly major event, and has everything to do with the story, then the author will talk about it enough so that reader grasps that the MC is "going through things" basically every day because of the trauma. The...

Then he cursed his wife who was sleeping in the front seat" Then he cursed his wife who slept in the front seat" :blob_okay: better~ Notice: when you write "was" instead of an action verb, you separate the subject from the action: The Boy was Hitting the ball - (Weak, passive see how WAS...

You're not wrong. How you're using was is not grammatically incorrect. Technically speaking. However, was is a "passive verb" meaning it causes the action to seem weak, unimportant. Not impactful. it separates the Person doing the action from the action. Also: " It was meant to express a...

January- Late Evening Tom Tailor drove his company car on a winding highway in Bulgaria. The darkening, sky filling with heavy snowfall, made it hard to see the road. Getting worried, Tom wondered if he’d reach the construction site before closing. “This is some blizzard,” he muttered while...

i don't think westerners take Valentines as seriously as anime would portray them. That's a "greeting card" holiday meant to sell stuff. But young folk are into it. so win win. But for most of us, on the far west hemisphere. Thanksgiving, Christmas, New Years would be the holidays that show in...

Good Omens by Neil Gaimen. More about friendship (between angel and demon). not tragic. Adventure/comedy. I read it a thousand years ago and loved it.

Text is written, and we do discuss writing here :blob_reach: :blob_hug:

Exactly ^ ! @TheEldritchGod Eldritch, Don't blindside the reader like that. What you want is the reader to be also sympathetic to the friend, while also dropping hints as to why the friend will betray the MC. But the point is to get the reader also on the side of the friend, with more lead up...

Bruv, what you are reading are amateurs who strip the stories of all subtext. There's no true "story engine," where the MC gets to actually show some impressive knowledge to a reader based on an expertise that he has, like a good author would. So what you are reading are the copycats who just...

Othello! See the movie with Larry Fishburne. He nails the character. @Agentt

Tiss. you folks went and found a handful of stories just to nit pick. And I'm not playing your RIDICULOUS game. anyone with two eyes, and spittle, not even A FUCKING MODICUM of sense in their head can see, when they come to this site, from the Trending pages ALONE. THAT THE MAJORITY OF THE...

my dude :cautious: Every. single. Effing day. you can go to trending and find that most of the top 25 have sexual nature tags. GB, GL, HAREm, Genderbender, ARE SEX!!!!!!!!!!!!

WOW this is delusion and the end of this convo.