Recent content by MadmanRB

Thing is, I overall like my dialog. I feel it gives my audience good insight to my characters and feels a lot less clunky to me than inner monologues, especially when I have the characters talking to each other. I mean, one of my main plots is the relationship between my two MCs and how they...

Eh, I could trim it down to 70% After all, I'm juggling two main characters here who are close friends. Well, yeah, I am (mostly) translating this story from a script. When writing for television, dialog is very crucial as unlike books things like internal monologues or scene painting are a...

I cannot help but notice that my stories, no matter what my genre, are extremely dialog heavy. It's still a habit I carried over from my short stories, as in there I didn't have the room for large inner monologues or descriptive paragraphs. My stories tend to be character driven, and for me the...

Okay final edit for now, I will let this one sit for a few days and see how you folks feel about it. I removed some parts, did some revisions and (hopefully) smoothed it out. https://docs.google.com/document/d/1E47xFGvMqT5c3OXafslNCYk9cvDTtAKWjYxetKqRJAo/edit?usp=sharing

Okay I edited the document based on some suggestions I got elsewhere... The link to the revised draft is different though, so please click the link I provided in my post above or just go here: https://docs.google.com/document/d/1E47xFGvMqT5c3OXafslNCYk9cvDTtAKWjYxetKqRJAo/edit?usp=sharing

Uhh I am asking for feedback on this new first chapter, the rest is just random replies from folks who rather make quips rather than give me feedback on my story. I would appreciate any further commentary to you know... actually give me feedback, so I can know what to do next I know this isn't a...

Hey semantics besides this is only surface level stuff and in the first chapter. I am more concerned about overall presentation, is this first chapter good enough to continue forward in its current state? Should I shorten it? Break it in two? I did try to reduce the dialog as much as I could, as...

The term "furry" is a rather broad and vague. For some, a furry is a person who dresses in a fursuit. For others, it's just another form of bestiality (it's not, btw) And yes, animated cartoon animals like Bugs Bunny are called "furries" by some folk. As a person who has had some interaction...

I want to get feedback for my revised first chapter, as I want to see where I need to improve and if it's engaging enough to justify writing a chapter 2. So first brief story synopsis and concept without plot spoilers: This is an action/science fiction story with superhero elements, it is set on...

Yeah, I already have some artwork for this project and would like to do more. If my best solution to solve my issues is to turn my story into a picture book or something, I will. I just know I am not going anywhere by treating this like a traditional novel Well, the good news is that I have a...

Yeah, and thus is a key problem with my story, it's definitely more suited for a comic book yet with me having zero art skills forces me to a medium without visual representation. My stick figures are so crooked, even the Nazi Swastika would tell them they should straighten up. Not to mention my...

I can't say I have, and well, maybe it's time I change that. After many tries at writing my story, I find myself trying to emulate writers based on the most common suggestions. My most recent drafts (not shown on this website) have emulated either Tolkien (still a gold standard by some folks)...

Well there lies another issue of mine, I actually do have a minor form of dyslexia, and I am on the autism spectrum. Minor form, of course, but it did come at the cost of me not graduating from high school until I was 20. Puts it into perspective, doesn't it? Sure, I am mostly caught up with the...

Actually creativity is one thing I am not lacking, I got creativity up to wazoo. My issue is more utilizing said creativity and expressing it in a comprehensive way. One that doesn't bore nor confuse my potential readers. I have one of those minds that runs at the speed of light, always thinking...

Well, it's not like the entirety of what I have I think might be boring, I do have some good character moments and settings for my audience to invest in. It's just that I have so much to set up, it's not just the characters I need to establish after all. I have a lot of universe building to do...