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The opening lines are kinda meh. You should cut basically everything before Are you not a native English speaker? Several parts have awkward wording, and you use ,,these" instead of "these" or 'these', which are standard American and British English respectively.

Possibly Wattpad? What's popular on different online writing sites: Wattpad - YA, something similar to Twilight SH - isekai, smut, gl RoyalRoad - JP/KR-style litrpg, isekai Webnovel - CN-style system FanFiction - fanfictions Those are the ones that I know; they're probably more out there.

I really hope you're writing this for yourself because if you're writing this to get popular on SH, you chose the wrong genres. Add: reincarnation, transmigration, alternative universe transportation, or second chance tropes to your main character. Add one or multiple of: litrpg, isekai/harem...

Going back and editing previous chapter never hurts.

Agreed. I am the most stupid person in this world that can't see the height of your glory and how amazing your writing style is.

Dropped after the 2nd paragraph. Reason: You desperately need a proofreader. Edit: Actually, awkward phrasing, comma splicing, and ommitting commas are perfectly okay; it's all just artistic flair. Keep on doing what you do.

You're right. Your story is amazing, the best in the world. It's very original with impeccable writing and unique characters. I can't say anything bad about it, for it's just that good. Rejoice. It will soon be adapted into a TV seriers that will make you a millionaire. You will be a famous...

No commas needed; "Kael" is an essential element. Also, this sentence is worded weirdly, especially the first part. https://owl.purdue.edu/owl/general_writing/punctuation/commas/commas_with_nonessential_elements.html this amounted -> the shrug amounted to "This" is slightly unclear on what it's...

Believe it or not, I like reading isekais. Jobless Reincarnation, Lord of the Mysteries, and Re: Zero are all amazing. I'm just picky about the junk food I eat. lol I love how this one is the complete opposite of the previous one. I can't help but feel that your prologue is a bit over-the-top...

Dropped in the middle of c1. The first line already bores me. I've seen maybe three million reincarnation stories, most of them shit, so what makes yours different? I have no idea, except for the fact that the dude has something to do with a gorilla. Okay, but these days, every isekai has...

Unluckily for you, I am a grammar nazi. If I'm not too interested in the premise (subjective) and the story has bad grammar, I drop. At the end of c1, I was debating whether to continue. I decided not to. You have 3 mechanics errors that I could spot (proofread your chapters, please), and you...

I suppose this comes from me not reading the synopsis/being new to the genre, which probably won't be the case for most of your readers(?) And I think worldbuilding is fine, especially if it's related to the plot. Except it's a web serial, and I have 0 expectations for the story. If I liked one...

Dropped in the middle of c2 because I got bored of the excessive worldbuilding. I was also more than slightly confused about the characters. I thought they were normal animals til you wrote that a camel had an *arm* and a cow had boobs and glasses. I'd cut off a little on the worldbuilding; fuck...

AGO Feedback: Dropped in the middle of c1. It suffers from 3 main things: Starting with worldbuilding Introducing too many characters at once Too much dialogue 1. Don't start with worldbuilding; it isn't interesting. I'm a worldbuilder myself, and I know how tempting it is to write about the...

I dropped at c15 through no fault of your own; it's written quite well, and it's quite engaging. I've just read too many of these types of novels, and I don't feel like reading another. Again, this is a me-problem, not a you-problem, so I still gave you a 5* review, since that's what it...

I already rated it 1* a long time ago lol

Like you said in the disclaimer, this really did cause me discomfort. You lost me on the first line. It's dull, it's too long, and it's hard to read. The first line is supposed to hook me in, not repulse me. I decided to finish the first chapter at least, since this is a story feedback thread...

Besides a few odd shifts in tense in Chapter 1 and a few mechanics errors that you could fix with a reread or two, I have no complaints. Enjoy your 5* review.

You think your novel is good? No, it's a piece of shit. Post a link to it, and I will insult it more. Enjoy.

Get lots of readers with 2 easy steps: Include GL, genderbender, litrpg, isekai, and smut Write lots of chapters Quality doesn't matter. Only the tags and the quantity. You can write the best scifi out there and it'll probably flop because SH's readerbase doesn't read scifi.