Writing Prompt A mother having second thought

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Premise: The character was raped. She became pregnant but didn't want to abort the child because she believed everyone deserve to live. She tried to bring up the child but it became harder and harder lately when she had to sacrifice so much of herself. She wanted to give up the child.

Prompt: You are her friend. Give her an advice and provide a solution to the four-year-old child.

Example:
"I heard the nobles in ... is looking for a kid."
"These traffickers would pay a good price for..."
"This orphanage is very..."
"I will take care of..."
or anything you want to think.

Edit: You can try to make a conversation with the child instead of talking with the mother. Also, you don't need to make the conversation directly after you took the child (a few months later would be fine, when the child begun to question the absence of their mother).
 
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"You know what's best served cold? No, not your kid. C'mon. We ain't cannibals. It's revenge."

Boom, intro to a story with the MC as the kid wanting to get revenge for their mother. Persons giving comfort helps train the kid. While the mother believes all life should be preserved, the kid doesn't. Kinda like that scene from Scarface where Tony says "I ain't gonna kill you." Then his buddy comes and goes "But I am.", and guns them down.

It's pretty unrealistic, because the realistic answer to this isn't something I also want to touch with a long pole.
 

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"Give me the kid. I'll take care of her—no strings attached. Here, sign this paper. Yep, here. Aaaaand, here. Everything seems to be in order; off we go!" I said, giving her a copy, and heading out, holding the little one's tiny hand.

"Where are we going?" She asked as she looked up at me, expectantly.

"Home. Something you did not experience yet. Also... from now on, call me Dad. I always wanted to hear it just did not had a chance..."

After they moved to a different city they lived happily ever after. The End.
 

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"Give me the kid. I'll take care of her—no strings attached. Here, sign this paper. Yep, here. Aaaaand, here. Everything seems to be in order; off we go!" I said, giving her a copy, and heading out, holding the little one's tiny hand.

"Where are we going?" She asked as she looked up at me, expectantly.

"Home. Something you did not experience yet. Also... from now on, call me Dad. I always wanted to hear it just did not had a chance..."

After they moved to a different city they lived happily ever after. The End.
May be MC offers to merry the Lone Mother and they look after the child together?
 

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May be MC offers to merry the Lone Mother and they look after the child together?
Nope. If a mother ever thinks about getting rid of her kid, then there is no chance of that. Going by the background setting, the situation of the kid was already fucked from the start. She is better off with a new life than anything that may connect her to her mom, for both of their sake.
 

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Nope. If a mother ever thinks about getting rid of her kid, then there is no chance of that. Going by the background setting, the situation of the kid was already fucked from the start. She is better off with a new life than anything that may connect her to her mom, for both of their sake.
Imagine as the premise was defined by CheertheSecond the mother is struggling to provide. So may be her thinking giving up the child will allow better life for the kid ? There she give up the child for its own good?
 

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Imagine as the premise was defined by CheertheSecond the mother is struggling to provide. So may be her thinking giving up the child will allow better life for the kid ? There she give up the child for its own good?
The sentence:
she had to sacrifice so much of herself.
This, for me, doesn't give me that kind of context. This gives off the feeling that she wasn't willing to give up her time and life for the kid. In these instances, the fact that the kid was conceived in the worst possible way can also come in and play, even if the mother originally wasn't thinking about it.

The subconscious is a bitch and can influence you without you realizing it. The fact that the kid is a child of rape can mess with the mother's psyche. It can become a pretty serious situation that could lead to more unfortunate things for both the mother and the kid and their mental stability and health.
 

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The sentence:

This, for me, doesn't give me that kind of context. This gives off the feeling that she wasn't willing to give up her time and life for the kid. In these instances, the fact that the kid was conceived in the worst possible way can also come in and play, even if the mother originally wasn't thinking about it.

The subconscious is a bitch and can influence you without you realizing it. The fact that the kid is a child of rape can mess with the mother's psyche. It can become a pretty serious situation that could lead to more unfortunate things for both the mother and the kid and their mental stability and health.

This is the majority of what I was trying to convey.

Sometimes, the mother feels sad for the foetus inside her, even though it was a result of a rape. However, that doesn’t changed the fact that she wasn’t prepared to be a mother before the rape. Therefore, when things became harder, it is plausible for her to have second thought. I do not think that everyone is capable of sticking with their own decision till death. Whether doing so is right or wrong and right or wrong to who, I want to leave it to you guys since that’s what this prompt is about.
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Nope. Sorry.
I do not have a pole long enought to touch that one.
But you are an eldritch God. Why the heck do you need a pole in the first place? Just use your tentacles.
 

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Imagine as the premise was defined by CheertheSecond the mother is struggling to provide. So may be her thinking giving up the child will allow better life for the kid ? There she give up the child for its own good?
I agree with @Corty, the prompt and its context as given don't really allow for much positivity when it comes to the reason of wanting to give up the child. Subconscious thoughts in the dark of the night are one thing, but the mother here already reached the stage of consciously thinking the child is a burden and her life would be better without them. At that point, wishing to part will never be about what's better for the kid. Depending on how desperate she is, and if she still holds some positive feelings towards the child, the mother might still care about their fate, but whether the kid will end up with a greater opportunity or a fate worse than hell, will mostly depend on the moral character of the friend giving the advice.

To me the context screams a decision that wasn't thought through carefully--or maybe made in a moment of weakness--which was regretted later. Withstanding the trials of single-motherhood, seing better job opportunities, relationships, and just life in general pass you by can be hard enough when loving a child unconditionally, let alone in this character's case. Seeing her reason for keeping the baby and her later attitude change gives me the impression that she didn't firmly decide on the child at the time, but was subconsciously affected by her beliefs instead. Like she didn't want to become (even more) 'wrong' by not terminating the pregnancy and never really thought about after what this would truly mean for her down the road.
 

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Why would anyone seek out a story about unloved children / child abandonment / cannibalism.

. . . she gave so much of herself.
>_>
 

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Mmmmmmmmm... It's a bit hard to write for this prompt, because it's a bit too direct and clear-cut, I guess?

Like, the solutions are a bit too straight-forward. Either you adopt the kid or bring the kid to a place they can live in safely.

When the mother is at this point, it's hard to try arguing about the mother trying to provide the best for the child, as the mother has already made her decision. At this point it's more about finding the best solution for the child, which the mother will probably accept as she no longer wishes to provide for the child anyways.

I think it would be honestly more interesting to try writing a conversation with the child than a conversation with the mother at this point. Like... After adopting the child, trying to help the child understand the new circumstances and stuff.

But the talk to the mother... I feel like there isn't much that is interesting to write about with this prompt? When the mother is already set on her decision, you just provide a solution and she probably accepts it.
 

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Mmmmmmmmm... It's a bit hard to write for this prompt, because it's a bit too direct and clear-cut, I guess?

Like, the solutions are a bit too straight-forward. Either you adopt the kid or bring the kid to a place they can live in safely.

When the mother is at this point, it's hard to try arguing about the mother trying to provide the best for the child, as the mother has already made her decision. At this point it's more about finding the best solution for the child, which the mother will probably accept as she no longer wishes to provide for the child anyways.

I think it would be honestly more interesting to try writing a conversation with the child than a conversation with the mother at this point. Like... After adopting the child, trying to help the child understand the new circumstances and stuff.

But the talk to the mother... I feel like there isn't much that is interesting to write about with this prompt? When the mother is already set on her decision, you just provide a solution and she probably accepts it.

Hmm. Now that I think about it, it does make sense that there isn't much noteworthy thing to talk to or hear from the mother. Yeah, just do that then. I will edit the prompt.
 

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"Hey, auntie... When is mommy coming to see me?" Ah... She asked it again.

I stopped cleaning the floor and looked at her with a gentle smile on my face, "Soon, okay? Mommy will soon come."

"When is soon?" She asked with eyes that were not filled with expectation any longer, but with sadness.

"When...?" I felt a pang in my heart, "I..." How do I tell it to her...? "I don't know."

"Then how do you know it is soon?" Each word that she spoke hurt.

I crouched down. I looked at my recently-adopted daughter in the eyes, "I just... Just trust her."

"Trust?" My daughter tilted her head.

I hugged her, "I trust her." I trust her to not give up on her daughter. I trust her to still love her daughter even after everything she has passed.

I felt tears coming to my eyes.

"Auntie... Hurt?" My little girl asked.

... How does she know? I am not sobbing, am I?

"There there, auntie. It will pass. It will pass." I could feel her hand rubbing my back... The situation should be reversed, shouldn't it?

"... Auntie loves you. Mommy loves you." I gently told her, as I carefully caressed her back.

Auntie trusts mommy... Auntie wants mommy to come visit and hug her daughter.

"Love you too, auntie." My beloved child told me.

... But auntie wants to be called mommy already... Would it be okay? Would it be okay to give up on waiting? Would it be okay to tell this lovely child that I am her mother now?

I don't know... I feel greedy... I want more than to be auntie...

For now... For now I kept on hugging her. For now I kept on waiting... I want to believe. I want to trust her. I want to trust the 'mommy'... But I really want to be the mommy already.

... Is it okay to wish for you to never come?

... Gods, I'm a horrible person.
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Ehe, this was fun to write. About the person who recently adopted the child, and still has hopes on her friend to come back and be a mom for the child she gave birth to, while at the same time really wanting to be the proper mom for the child~

It's a nice internal conflict to write about, I think~
 

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You are her friend. Give her an advice and provide a solution to the four-year-old child.
"Send the little shit to the orphanage, girl! You're too young to take care of it"
"But, it's too..."
"Do you want to spend at least the next decade of your life looking after this thing?"
"It's not a thing! He has a name! It's-"
"Burden. That's his name. Come on. Let's be honest, do you care for it because you care about it, or because you are feeling guilty?"
"..."
"Do you love it? Look me in the eye, right now, and say it"
"...I..."
"You..."
"I..."
"Yes?"
"I DON'T LOVE IT! For God's sake! I hate every moment I see its disgusting little eyes. Mommy, mommy! Fuck, it sickens me to even be in its presence!"
"There, there now"
"It looks just like that fucking piece of shit and I'm supposed to love it? I tried so hard, I swear I did, but, hick, I just can't!"
"There, now, let it out"
"Can you help me send it away?"
"Of course, deary. Anything for a friend"

a few days later the mother has a nervous breakdown. Following is a conversation with the child

"I hate you! You took my mommy!"
"No, I didn't"
"I hate you!"
"Sir, when can we be done here?"
"Soon" (social worker)
 
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