LilTV1155
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Feedback for Archive of FAS Lores: Chapter 2
Word Count: 4559 words
Hi
I need feedbacks and writing advices on this story. I am aware and accept that this Chapter may have a lot of errors that I need to fix, especially the grammars and the plot flow. But I am not sure where to find them. It also may not catch your interest since I am trying to write the story in Chapter 2 as a fairytale, the mean kind that warns people of symbolic dangers.
The Characters have a Capitalized letter in their names that describe their main features. They are named so due to their significant roles in the story. As for issues with the names and colors, I have put up a direct statement in Chapter 1.
There is not much "it" used, instead male and female pronouns are used for Beasts and Plants, the only types of creatures found in the story.
There are possibly extreme violence and gore that might trigger your Intolerance.
I want to know if this story can be considered a PG-13?
How should I break down this sub-story since it it part of a bigger story?
Thank you,
LilTV1155
Word Count: 4559 words
Hi
I need feedbacks and writing advices on this story. I am aware and accept that this Chapter may have a lot of errors that I need to fix, especially the grammars and the plot flow. But I am not sure where to find them. It also may not catch your interest since I am trying to write the story in Chapter 2 as a fairytale, the mean kind that warns people of symbolic dangers.
The Characters have a Capitalized letter in their names that describe their main features. They are named so due to their significant roles in the story. As for issues with the names and colors, I have put up a direct statement in Chapter 1.
There is not much "it" used, instead male and female pronouns are used for Beasts and Plants, the only types of creatures found in the story.
There are possibly extreme violence and gore that might trigger your Intolerance.
I want to know if this story can be considered a PG-13?
How should I break down this sub-story since it it part of a bigger story?
Thank you,
LilTV1155
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