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Big brothers and sisters, may I ask of your kindness to help me evaluate my story. I'm not new to writing and publishing stories in the web. Just that, I'm still not confident on my technical side. Especially on tenses, grammar, and things I may not have noticed.
Synopsis:
Two worlds, one man.
Pon Button, a talented young refiner torn between his brother and mother. Unbeknownst to him, his mother returned as a high mistress of the enemy forces in Wildlands. A place where his brother the 'would be' leader of an offensive army of the stronghold city, Targon. In order to seal the long cursed land.
An undesired battle fell upon his shoulders without his knowledge.
Synopsis:
Two worlds, one man.
Pon Button, a talented young refiner torn between his brother and mother. Unbeknownst to him, his mother returned as a high mistress of the enemy forces in Wildlands. A place where his brother the 'would be' leader of an offensive army of the stronghold city, Targon. In order to seal the long cursed land.
An undesired battle fell upon his shoulders without his knowledge.
Close Combat Refiner
Two conflicting worlds, one man. Pon Button, a talented young refiner torn between his brother and mother. Unbeknownst to him, his mother returned as a high mistress of the enemy forces in Wildlands. A place where his brother the 'would be' leader of an offensive army of the stronghold city,...
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