Comments about this prologue I'm writing

Yiphen

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I'm currently messing around with writing a prologue for my story, and it's reached the point where I'm looking for any sort of comments from an outside party. If there is anything you feel is a bit off, please let me know. The people described are meant to be vague since it takes place a while later, though I feel like it might be a bit too metaphorical.
So, if you read it, let me know what you think. Thanks!
 

lazyredragon

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Ayyeeeee lad!
I love such limericks, starts slow but purposeful I'd like some more urgency but doesn't matter much,

Much love from a dragon
 

Nerodith

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I left comments on it !
It's quite intringuing, which is good, but also quite confusing. Like, he's a mouse, a cat? I don't understand anything xD But it seems that you've done it on purpose ^^
 

Sandycat135

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Personally, I really like it. I think the style of writing is really charming.
 
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