ForestDweller
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This has been bugging me for a while. It's about whether or not I'm using too much descriptive words/sentences after the MC says something. So, something like this for example, context being the MC asking a girl to dance in a ballroom.
"I thought you might want a dance," I said with a smirk.
The "I said with a smirk" part. Should I add that? I'm not sure if it's right to do so since it's from the MC's perspective.
Same with "I smiled", "I grinned", "I returned with a blush", etc.
Without them, I'm worried the readers won't know how the MC's facial reaction is.
"I thought you might want a dance," I said with a smirk.
The "I said with a smirk" part. Should I add that? I'm not sure if it's right to do so since it's from the MC's perspective.
Same with "I smiled", "I grinned", "I returned with a blush", etc.
Without them, I'm worried the readers won't know how the MC's facial reaction is.