Phantomheart
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The Satisfaction of 100 Lifetimes: Marigold’s Reincarnation
This might be my late night paranoia and third caffeine crash talking, but I was having some doubts about my novel and whether or not it actually lived up to any of the expectations set through its tags and description. I know that the tags Modern Knowledge, Power Struggle, and Doting Love Interests, have yet to become a large part of the story yet, but I was wondering it they actually lined up with the story. I know a good description and cover image draws a reader in, but if that description does not match with the tone or setting of the actual novel, then it is worthless, if the cover is pretty but the writing is shit, then it is worthless.
I've shoved in allusions to fairytales, biblical stories, and myths. I've put in literary devices of rhyme and imagery when it comes to important scenes of the character's thought. I had even put in a continuous string of foreshadowing around the image of a bird's nest. But I don't know if any of these are obvious to the reader or are just too subtle. I know that I am my own worst critic, so I want to get some feedback on what can be done.
The feedback I have gotten back from my readers so far is that they like the imagery and description used in the story and that they catch onto the omens and foreshadowing pretty quickly. Everything else, I am stumped and in a hole.
Pls help.
Marigold was your average cannon fodder villainess; she schemed and plotted against her perfect half-sister, the heroine, she attempted to assassinate her own twin brother for betraying her, and she tried to defame her fiance, the prince. Now of course, none of this worked, and eventually she was imprisoned for her crimes. However, on the day of her pardon, where her sister, now queen, gave her mercy, she swiped a guard's weapon and took her own life.
With her last breath filled with curses towards her family and ex-fiance, she left the world with her heart full of hatred. However, her story did not end there; the next thing that Marigold knew, she was in another world with the faint memory of making some sort of deal -- a shadow's mere whisper that in exchange for one hundred lifetimes, she could have her own happily ever after.
However, one hundred lifetimes changes a person, especially when they can go through different eras and periods, all as mere cannon fodder. She met another transmigrator in one of her lives and soon moved on from her hatred -- it wasn't worth it anymore.
But when her contract is complete and she is sent back to her very first life when all her troubles first began, Marigold can't help but change her fate, even if it is not as cruel as she first imagined it so many lifetimes ago. Eventually though, with the help of the strange second prince she gets her own happily ever after.
With her last breath filled with curses towards her family and ex-fiance, she left the world with her heart full of hatred. However, her story did not end there; the next thing that Marigold knew, she was in another world with the faint memory of making some sort of deal -- a shadow's mere whisper that in exchange for one hundred lifetimes, she could have her own happily ever after.
However, one hundred lifetimes changes a person, especially when they can go through different eras and periods, all as mere cannon fodder. She met another transmigrator in one of her lives and soon moved on from her hatred -- it wasn't worth it anymore.
But when her contract is complete and she is sent back to her very first life when all her troubles first began, Marigold can't help but change her fate, even if it is not as cruel as she first imagined it so many lifetimes ago. Eventually though, with the help of the strange second prince she gets her own happily ever after.
This might be my late night paranoia and third caffeine crash talking, but I was having some doubts about my novel and whether or not it actually lived up to any of the expectations set through its tags and description. I know that the tags Modern Knowledge, Power Struggle, and Doting Love Interests, have yet to become a large part of the story yet, but I was wondering it they actually lined up with the story. I know a good description and cover image draws a reader in, but if that description does not match with the tone or setting of the actual novel, then it is worthless, if the cover is pretty but the writing is shit, then it is worthless.
I've shoved in allusions to fairytales, biblical stories, and myths. I've put in literary devices of rhyme and imagery when it comes to important scenes of the character's thought. I had even put in a continuous string of foreshadowing around the image of a bird's nest. But I don't know if any of these are obvious to the reader or are just too subtle. I know that I am my own worst critic, so I want to get some feedback on what can be done.
The feedback I have gotten back from my readers so far is that they like the imagery and description used in the story and that they catch onto the omens and foreshadowing pretty quickly. Everything else, I am stumped and in a hole.
Pls help.