Feedback for my Villainess Noble Girl Series

[DalangTala]

Merge Riot!
A satirical light novel about a transmigrator turned villainous noble girl. And an MC with questionable morals.

CURRENTLY: Has 8 chapters (I will edit this part from time to time if I update my series)

Especially on the following aspects:

• Narration - Is it smooth? Over or Underdeveloped? Inconsistencies? Are there things I have to take note of?
• Pacing - Too fast? Too slow?
• Coco - What's your perception about the MC? I don't know how readers see her. Is she a likeable character?
• Character Interaction - Comments?
• Lackluster - In what point did you felt like the chapter lacks something? At what point did you start to lose interest? Why?
• Recommendations

Thank you so much! It will help me a lot as I continue writing!

 

[nani]

Merge Riot!
A satirical light novel about a transmigrator turned villainous noble girl. And an MC with questionable morals.

CURRENTLY: Has 6 chapters (I will edit this part from time to time if I update my series)

Especially on the following aspects:

• Narration - Is it smooth? Over or Underdeveloped? Inconsistencies? Are there things I have to take note of?
• Pacing - Too fast? Too slow?
• Coco - What's your perception about the MC? I don't know how readers see her. Is she a likeable character?
• Character Interaction - Comments?
• Lackluster - In what point did you felt like the chapter lacks something? At what point did you start to lose interest? Why?
• Recommendations

Thank you so much! It will help me a lot as I continue writing!

Done. I sent it through pm.

 

[DalangTala]

Done. I sent it through pm.

Thank you so much! I've read it and it's really helpful.