Feedback on Chapter 1?

[Deleted member 42252]

Hey guys! So, I finally bit the bullet and posted the first chapter of my new fantasy novel! I would love to get some feedback on it! I'm working on chapter 2 and 3 rn, and I hopefully will be able to post chapter 2 by Monday. :)) I'll also give you some feedback on your stories, so just drop a link! If it interests me then I'll check it out!

Link: https://www.scribblehub.com/series/215087/zira-of-yendenburg/

 

[BlackFrost]

Sure, i'll check it out now tell you what I think.

 

[Deleted member 42252]

Here’s the new link!

Zira of Yendenburg

“Once again, I had lost control.” Witch. The words made her stone cold. To call someone a witch meant that death would be approaching soon, and Zira knew that she didn’t have much time before her father surrendered her. Zira knew she had to do something and quick, and...

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