Honestly, I won't comment too much on the content because I am not part of your target audience. So I'll just comment on another thing that might you hold back. Especially on a webnovel site: The pacing of the chapter feels really off.
It starts with a 52 words sentence paragraph in the beginning that is needlessly complex and has the actual important information at the very end thanks to passive voice. That's a sentence one needs to read 3 times to get all the information, because you mix a lot of different subjects into one passive sentence.
When starting your novel is already a chore, that's an instant drop for a lot of people who look for an enjoyable and light reading experience compared to reading a textbook. And this is the very first impression your reader will get.
And the same thing continues through the next paragraphs. It feels like you want to push as much information as possible into one sentence, but this leads to the focus of the sentence or paragraph jumping topics as well. Going by my first impression: cutting most long sentences into two shorter ones with their own topic would improve the reading flow by a lot.
It's not badly written, but the jumping focus makes it harder to follow than it needs to be. And every time it jumps to a place I didn't expect, it takes me out of the reading and I question why I would want to continue.
It's the same with the endless ";" of the character description pressed into one big paragraph screaming "skip me!". If I take the time and the focus to read through it, there might be a lot of good information in it, but the nagging at the back of my head tells me, that I invested more than I should have.
And it's a shame, because there are parts of the chapter filled with a lot of good foundation, e.g. the combination of action and dialogue. But then there is another paragraph like this:
They headed to their bed where they left their phone last night thinking how they were going to break the news to their spouse or how Ghyuoui will take it if they refuse, when they noticed that Ghyuoui was about to trip on a bottle and pulled them out of the way.
Multiple topics squeezed into one long sentence with no focus. Once more, I'm out of my flow. And that's also important, because without a nice reading flow, I'll see all the little mistakes made in the chapter. Wrong tense, wrong punctuation, a sentence that is slightly off.
I might have read through that normally, but now I'm focused on it, because the book asked for my full attention. And it doesn't help. It just throws the "Do you really want to read it?" question at me over and over again. Until I stopped.
Once more, I'm probably not part of your target audience. But your writing style makes it really hard to get invested into your story and find the reasons to continue. It's hard to get hooked, when I first need to invest a lot of my time and attention.
Hence, the one advice I'll leave: work on your pacing. You want to hook people who look at this chapter from their phone or tablet. Readers who have 100+ stories in their reading list and will always have an alternative at hand, if they get bored in the middle of the beginning. This isn't a book they paid 10$ for and now feel obligated to sit through. Instead, they are only a click away from something else.
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A bit on the overall topic of my feedback, but just to add a simple thing: if the flow and understanding of your chapter relies on the glossary, you are doing something wrong. Nobody wants to read a textbook to understand your story. Every information needed should be given inside the story and the glossary should only be used for (a) unimportant additional information for those who like it or (b) to remind people who forget stuff.
That said, I just ignored the pronouns at some point, because the difference between "They" and "They" didn't help...