First time writer looking for advice and critique

[Arcanix]

The Core Summoner is the first time that I have ever put words to paper. I prefer to read than to create, but I couldn't find a story that satisfied me as a reader. So I decided to create my own.

I'm about 4 chapters in now and closing in on 10k words after a couple of days of writing. I was hoping to get some feedback from you guys here. So I can fix some of the most glaring mistakes early.

I appreciate any advice and constructive criticism!

 

[UYScuti]

All these threads about cheating onto trending, I think this is the one true way.

Ariel with red hair and a lightning spear Did king Triton pass away? Are Flotsam and Jetsom in there? Scuttle sounds like a ranger, maybe thief; he should be on the team. Tbh, I’ll be a little sad if there’s no Ursula. I never liked how Prince Eric took her out with the ship.

 

[Discount_Blade]

All these threads about cheating onto trending, I think this is the one true way.

Ariel with red hair and a lightning spear Did king Triton pass away? Are Flotsam and Jetsom in there? Scuttle sounds like a ranger, maybe thief; he should be on the team. Tbh, I’ll be a little sad if there’s no Ursula. I never liked how Prince Eric took her out with the ship.

Wut?

 

[UYScuti]

Wut?

First chapter has Ariel with red hair and a lightning spear. Didn’t watch the little mermaid?

 

[Discount_Blade]

First chapter has Ariel with red hair and a lightning spear. Didn’t watch the little mermaid?

Can't say Disney was a big thing in my childhood. Or anyone else I grew up with. First movie I ever watched, I was 5. Tales of the Crypt: Demon Night. Had Billy Zane in it.

 

[Fromage]

Where is the Isetan Isekai tag?

 

[K5Rakitan]

I couldn't find a story that satisfied me as a reader. So I decided to create my own.

That's the best reason to write.

Most readers on ScribbleHub are silent.
For feedback, I recommend writing.com or WritersCafe. Both of those sites have point systems that encourage users to leave reviews.

 

[Arcanix]

Where is the Isetan Isekai tag?

Excellent advice, thank you!

 

[High-in-the-skys]

As a reader,
I believe there are no 'bad' stories it's just that other stories have poor 'execution'

 

[Arcanix]

New chapter is up!

 

[Arcanix]

Chapter 6 is up!