- Nov 30, 2021
Oh, I see the flaw now of the first half of the chapter. Thanks for the feedback!Would not keep reading.
You start by playing up a very normal thing in the most extreme way possible to the point that I became confused if it was a normal thing. It's hyperbolic right?
And then you have your Mc just telling us stuff about their life. We don't find anything out on our own. We're just spoon fed information in the first person.
It levels off and improves with the cat since it's your premise and far more interesting, but it doesn't save it for me.