How does this synopsis look?

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Note: I used *X* for the MC's name, and *B* for the name of the fictional country, because I haven't decided those names yet. This is a fantasy story fusing high and urban fantasy (fictional world, but w/modern tech). This is also non-LitRPG, non-Isekai, and non-Harem.

However, this story can be classified under the "Smut" genre since, overall, there will be A LOT of sex scenes overall if all of them are counted up, but these scenes occur a very long time after the story's beginning and only occur between story arcs.


Synopsis:
*X* is a loser. He is a cat boy that doesn’t have any friends, has never had a girlfriend, thinks he’s ugly, and works for an abusive boss. A curvy fox girl who has one of the biggest butts he has ever seen, and who is also a thief who uses magic in combat and steals to help others, is somebody he sees almost daily. One day, this fox girl invites *X* to join her in a heist that can oust his boss from the workplace forever. Who wouldn’t want that? Join *X* and his pals as they strengthen their magic through battles and practice, have kinky sex, and commit heroic robberies throughout the land of *B*!

Author's Note I'll include in the 1st chapter before the 1st chapter actually begins:
This story doesn’t take place on Earth. Gender expectations in this fictional world are also reversed (e.g. women are the ones expected to approach men sexually). There will be plenty of sex scenes, and yuri (F/F/F), but the romance will be developed first.
 
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Advice from someone bad with synopses:

It sounds interesting, but you may want to shorten the sentences.

Example, (probably very bad):
He constantly sees a curvy fox girl. She has one of the biggest butts he has ever seen. Being a thief, she steals to help others. In combat she uses magic.
 

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“X” is a catboy with no friends, has never had a girlfriend, and works for an abusive boss. One day, a curvy fox girl known for her combat magic and large butt asks “X” to join her in a heist that can oust his boss from the workplace forever.

Follow “X” as he makes friends, learns combat magic, and has kinky sex while robbing “B” blind.

Something like this might be clearer.
 

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Synopsis is actually a summary of your story. They are often a few pages long. This is not a synopsis. However, this is a common misuse; people use synopsis when they meant a blurb.

Now, as a blurb it is okay. It non-vaguely presents what kind of story it is. It is obviously targeted to a certain audience. The writing can be improved to make it clear and have more impact, otherwise not that bad.

Also, I want you to clarify this, what do you mean when you say story arcs? From your blurb, it seems that this story would be episodic and have no overarching story arcs something akin to Lupin the Third. It does not appear to be like One Piece where the main quest (the overarching story arc) is to find One Piece and become the Pirate King.

I also have to note that, there seems to be a lack of antagonist. It is often a good practice to actually put the main antagonist into the blurb.
 
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Write what you want and Publish what you want is what I always say. Go for it!
 

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“X” is a catboy with no friends, has never had a girlfriend, and works for an abusive boss. One day, a curvy fox girl known for her combat magic and large butt asks “X” to join her in a heist that can oust his boss from the workplace forever.

Follow “X” as he makes friends, learns combat magic, and has kinky sex while robbing “B” blind.

Something like this might be clearer.
Yes, this is better.
 

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Ideally, a blurb will have specific ideas from the story and a clever hook to get people interested. It can't just inform readers - it has to make them want to find out who these interesting characters are and what happens to them. For instance:

Life is hard when you're a misfit catboy. Xin's love life is non-existent, he looks like a feral tomcat (at least that's what he's heard), and his boss is a literal demon. When not dreaming of his boss's premature death, Xin dreams of Yin, a dummy thicc foxgirl with a heart of gold, a talent for magical chicanery, and a predilection for taking things that aren't hers. When Yin recruits Xin for a sketchy heist that will save the Zyx orphanage and get Xin's boss fired, how can he possibly refuse? Join Xin and his friends as they master the mystical arts and explore their kinkier sides, all while becoming the greatest folk hero thieves the land of Bin has ever seen!

(obviously, I've filled in some random details)
 

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Sweet revenge! Have fun with that :)
 

MorweMorningMorgen

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This blurb should be better:

*X* is a cat-boy with low self-esteem and a non-existent social life. He works for an abusive boss whom he resents. When a curvy fox-girl with one of the biggest butts he has ever seen invites him to join her in a daring plan to rob his workplace, how could he refuse?

Join *X* and his pals as they live double lives as thieves who steal to help others, master the art of magic, battle tyrants, and have kinky sex!
 
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