Agentt
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So, recently, I wrote a oneshot with a mission to create the most mind boggling chaotic experience ever. I wanted to make the readers not just feel "what did I just read?," but also, "why did I just read that?"
But after I published it and re-read, I noticed something.
Instead of creating the brain death I wanted, this piece just makes readers confused.
Its so disorienting, and so...unlinked, it doesn't make me feel the chaos at all, it just looks like gibberish. It looks like I used a random word generator. Reading it just forces you to skip words, then lines and finally paragraphs, making people completely skim through the plant smut.
This here is the one shot
So, basically, how to connect it all? How to keep the readers engaged while nothing makes sense?
But after I published it and re-read, I noticed something.
Instead of creating the brain death I wanted, this piece just makes readers confused.
Its so disorienting, and so...unlinked, it doesn't make me feel the chaos at all, it just looks like gibberish. It looks like I used a random word generator. Reading it just forces you to skip words, then lines and finally paragraphs, making people completely skim through the plant smut.
This here is the one shot
(Oneshot)The Company Which Killed Time
There was once a company which charged money to kill time, If you had an hour to spare, you would magically end up with a quarter of it, sometimes. This was a successful business, until, a strange man came along. Who ruined everything till the company decided to go back...
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So, basically, how to connect it all? How to keep the readers engaged while nothing makes sense?