CupcakeNinja
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Whilst i was jerking it to incest hentai, I noticed a notification in another tab. And wouldn't you know it, some dude reviewed a story of mine! Now, after jerking it i did go and browse through what was said, and it was not the ego-wank i SPECIFICALLY ASKED FOR. That's fine, i don't need my ego wanked more than it already is each time i gaze upon myself in the mirror.
Anyway, i did agree with one thing he said: The story is a mess. But that's because...it's meant to be? Well, the first 20 chapters were fine, they still fit the genre , then it became like your average supernatural smut romance story. But not JP ones, most are trash. I am a man of quality, i write only the spiciest of sex scenes.
That aside, its a comedy. Not a drama. Characters are made to be fun, not serious or realistic, and they are put in situations that will help them be fun. Then there was the usual nonsense of "show not tell" as if that ever means anything. The scenes are clearly written, im just not heavy on descriptions and most JP stories arent either. Show, not tell, is what i consider the most pretentious thing to say about writing. Since most of us write with JP and CN styles in mind, it won't be heavy on descriptive details. We aren't writing western-style stories. You cant compare Konosuba to Game of Thrones, know what i mean? Two entirely different style of writing. Now i ain't mad at the dude who reviewed, he was nice about it. But it got me thinking: He is but a reader, he knows only what I have deigned to show
MOVING ON~
That thought is why I'm here. How do YOU, as authors, review your own story? Because as authors we know more about the story than other people. If they say, "well this was brought up but later never mentioned again" we can say "...not YET anyway"
Because readers can only judge by what we've written so far, whereas we can judge from what we have planned. We see the whole picture, or at least we always know more than the readers will. So yeah, with your privileged knowledge as an author, pick a story of yours and review it.
Anyway, i did agree with one thing he said: The story is a mess. But that's because...it's meant to be? Well, the first 20 chapters were fine, they still fit the genre , then it became like your average supernatural smut romance story. But not JP ones, most are trash. I am a man of quality, i write only the spiciest of sex scenes.
That aside, its a comedy. Not a drama. Characters are made to be fun, not serious or realistic, and they are put in situations that will help them be fun. Then there was the usual nonsense of "show not tell" as if that ever means anything. The scenes are clearly written, im just not heavy on descriptions and most JP stories arent either. Show, not tell, is what i consider the most pretentious thing to say about writing. Since most of us write with JP and CN styles in mind, it won't be heavy on descriptive details. We aren't writing western-style stories. You cant compare Konosuba to Game of Thrones, know what i mean? Two entirely different style of writing. Now i ain't mad at the dude who reviewed, he was nice about it. But it got me thinking: He is but a reader, he knows only what I have deigned to show
MOVING ON~
That thought is why I'm here. How do YOU, as authors, review your own story? Because as authors we know more about the story than other people. If they say, "well this was brought up but later never mentioned again" we can say "...not YET anyway"
Because readers can only judge by what we've written so far, whereas we can judge from what we have planned. We see the whole picture, or at least we always know more than the readers will. So yeah, with your privileged knowledge as an author, pick a story of yours and review it.