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[Lloyd]

You can read mine if you want. About to get started on some new chapters.

 

[doravg]

You can read mine if you want. About to get started on some new chapters.

I already reviewed yours back in September.

 

[Lloyd]

I already reviewed yours back in September.

Kek

I already reviewed yours back in September.

Thanks i completely forgot

 

[BenJepheneT]

i'll take anything at this point

you'll find this to be a bit deviant but hell, it's smut anyway

and don't worry; there's a story behind this one

The Problem Store

There was a guy who went by the name of Guy. He lives in a World, and has many stories to tell about it. Stories of relationships, indulgence, brotherhood, reconciliation, women, and skinship. Especially women and skinship. Guy has a lot of stories about women and skinship. You may or...

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[aimless]

Please no GL. The smut better have plot attached to it, if your story has smut. Otherwise, I can read anything. I will try dropping a review and hearts on each story and, if I find things I really don't like, I will PM the author, so they can consider my suggestions without people seeing them. I am bored and can't seem to write more than 2k words per day, so, I need something else to fill my free time with. Therefore, I offer this thread as my way to give something to the wonderful SH community.
Done so far:

The Magic Lumberjack

Kane — who was once a mighty ax saint and master blacksmith — fell from his glory after completing his vengeance. He fled to a faraway kingdom but was killed by an invading demon in an unfortunate event. For an unknown reason, his journey somehow hasn’t ended. Kane found himself in...

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Lewd Poems

Do bodily functions amuse you? Are you intrigued by reproductive organs? Does simply being a placental mammal tickle you? If you answered yes to any of the above questions, this book is for you! This is a collection of lewd poems from various authors. My husband either inspired me or...

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LORD OF WHISPERS

To rise to the top or fall to oblivion. A world engulfed by war and chaos, where a single day decides who you will become, where it is impossible to escape fate. As the Lady of the Night shines brightly upon a few, their journeys intertwine. In an age of...

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Dr Z’s Zombie Apocalypse

Doctor Abraham Henry Zolnikov has spent the last seven years isolated in his orbital laboratory, watching the Earth below descend into chaos. A biological virus combined with a nanite programming virus has created flesh eating, mindless abominations that hunt all other living things for food...

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I-RANGRIS: Adventure in the world of Astiriya

When I-rangris find out a hidden portal inside her own cupboard which leads her into a different world, finds out how her life changes. What does she discover and where her destiny leads her? From Kingdoms to lands, slices of lives to the royal palace, Wars attend to seek peacefulness...

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Spirit Exorcists

When Mark's troubled friend, Ruby, takes her own life, a grieving Mark heads to her suicide spot to pay his respects. In a strange twist of fate, he is attacked by a powerful spirit that reveals itself to be Ruby. Shen, an exorcist from the Spiritual Anomalies Investigation Bureau, an...

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The Condemned Child

Ten years ago, the parents of Shinsato Katsuro were brutally killed by an army of demons known as Shifters. Now, at sixteen, Katsuro is determined to enter the Celestial Military Academy, begin training for the war effort and ultimately save humanity from this perpetual, brutal conflict between...

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Everlasting Mage

Meet Matt~ Oh Magical Matt. He used to be a magician street performer. But after a one-stone-petrifying encounter with real magic, everything about his life changed. Now, he was an immobile statue that could not do shit about his life while time eroded itself. Magic was his only way to...

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Free Lances

'All right, boys and girls, quit sucking your ma's teats. It's high time we bloody earn our paychecks!' Born in times of turmoil, orphaned at a young age, and raised amongst rowdy sellswords, young Reinhardt Edelstein joined the mercenary trade as well when he grew up. When misfortune finally...

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It’s in my signature, hope you enjoy!

 

[Gryphon]

It would be interesting hearing about someone's opinion on my story. It is does have the smut tag, but there is an overall story going on that I'm pretty proud of myself. I'm nearly finished with the first major arc of my story too, so this times well with that. The link is in the signature if you would like to check it out.

 

[JenLeifire]

You can add to the list crime or mystery/thriller. well mine is tagged with all of them XD If you are interested you can check it out, would like to know how its received. not many chapters out yet though and it is BL. Hope you don't mind that =)

Escaping the Abyss

Chains and bottles of liquids are scattered across the dark room. If your hearing is sharp enough, you can hear screams echoing throughout the building. “Will I always be alone and remain caged in this hell?” ––– Dark clouds gather around the city, a mastermind in the shadows giving rise to...

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[Mr.Grey-Cat]

Then hope you enjoy my novel, and I would appreciate it.

Lost Solace Online

As a person faithful to her hobbies, Alice made the usual decision to play and indulge herself with a new and interesting game, but... Hmmm, somehow it feels like something is really wrong here though? Huh, she is just tired? but that eerie crimson moon i-... What? it's normal? Oh,...

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[MareoKen]

Done. And your cover is just fine, too. (I noticed that you were asking about it on a different thread.)

Thanks! I ended up changing my cover haha, might experiment with it for a bit...

 

[Armored99]

Just came here to be controversial,

You misspelled Thriller as triller, and I think by urban stories you might mean 'slice of life'.
Also why did you put 'fantasy with action' if you weren't going to put fantasy with no action?

 

[doravg]

i'll take anything at this point

you'll find this to be a bit deviant but hell, it's smut anyway

and don't worry; there's a story behind this one

The Problem Store

There was a guy who went by the name of Guy. He lives in a World, and has many stories to tell about it. Stories of relationships, indulgence, brotherhood, reconciliation, women, and skinship. Especially women and skinship. Guy has a lot of stories about women and skinship. You may or...

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done.

 

[BenJepheneT]

done.

Much thanks, chief. Awaiting the nuclear review with anticipation.

 

[doravg]

It would be interesting hearing about someone's opinion on my story. It is does have the smut tag, but there is an overall story going on that I'm pretty proud of myself. I'm nearly finished with the first major arc of my story too, so this times well with that. The link is in the signature if you would like to check it out.

done

 

[LostLibrarian]

I mean why not? :D

The Lone Macaw

The moment the dying Aki opens his eyes, he is shocked. Not his hospice room but green meadows, blue sky and the villages of his favorite MMO await him. A fever dream? Or a new lease of life? To Aki it’s a chance to correct the story line he...

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More feedback is always welcome =)

 

[doravg]

Hi! I'd like some feedback on my novel too .It's more character driven in school life . I've written only 10 chapters so far . My focus has been more on dialogue between characters since most novels I've read tend to lack substance in dialogue . I thought banter between characters would come off as more dynamic . He evens blurts out his inner monologues since he is that blunt . The point was so other characters could hear his life philosophies .The character backstory hasn't been revealed yet t for now i am slowly introducing new characters , then building them up , portraying the conflicts , then how the mc is going to step in and how that's going to affect him .Ultimately how those characters are going to affect the mc is still in the works . No smut . Adult jokes here there since that's how the mc is . He is a mixture of the good parts of some of my fav characters so any feed back would be appreciated . I also post the novel on webnovels.

Breaking the Masquerade

Join our MC as he navigates through highschool as he comes to terms with his past and his inner demons . He is blunt , sarcastic ,charismatic , loves his gentleman talk , doesn't shy away from teasing the ladies and he bitch slaps people that have it coming. But under all the farce...

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done

 

[Lorelliad]

I've always wanted to see how much I improved from my original story

RE: All From His Seat

They say Krodoa is very much alive. 'That' planet of magic, home to countless races and supernatural phenomenon. This very world is set to undergo an enormous change as Michael, a human from Earth, is reincarnated into the body of a baby.

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[patbateman123x]

done

thank you for the feedback .I'll work on making more progress .

 

[doravg]

You can add to the list crime or mystery/thriller. well mine is tagged with all of them XD If you are interested you can check it out, would like to know how its received. not many chapters out yet though and it is BL. Hope you don't mind that =)

Escaping the Abyss

Chains and bottles of liquids are scattered across the dark room. If your hearing is sharp enough, you can hear screams echoing throughout the building. “Will I always be alone and remain caged in this hell?” ––– Dark clouds gather around the city, a mastermind in the shadows giving rise to...

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Done. When are you updating?(Asking for a friend )

 

[JenLeifire]

Done. When are you updating?(Asking for a friend )

thankies <3 glad you like it =D haha update will be soon, around the next few days =3

 

[doravg]

I mean why not? :D

The Lone Macaw

The moment the dying Aki opens his eyes, he is shocked. Not his hospice room but green meadows, blue sky and the villages of his favorite MMO await him. A fever dream? Or a new lease of life? To Aki it’s a chance to correct the story line he...

www.scribblehub.com

More feedback is always welcome =)

Done. When Aki died, I shed a tear. Good showing skills.

I've always wanted to see how much I improved from my original story

RE: All From His Seat

They say Krodoa is very much alive. 'That' planet of magic, home to countless races and supernatural phenomenon. This very world is set to undergo an enormous change as Michael, a human from Earth, is reincarnated into the body of a baby.

www.scribblehub.com

Done. How does the blind MC read books, anyway? Braille?

I am done with all the entries, and I am now accepting submissions.