Ghostworker
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new author here, hope to hear your thoughts.
thoughts?Ghostworker's story:
I created Magic!
When a futuristic scientist is transported into the body of a primitive man in a newly formed world, under the oppression of the Gods human beings are lambs. In a world without mercy, See how Elric rises and uses the body of a mortal to tear down those so-called 'Gods'....www.scribblehub.com
These two paragraphs are the first that bring up your actual plot and they're backwards.'village priest?' Elric inwardly thought. Suddenly he remembered something and a burst of murder and anger filled his head.
His memories returned to Elric's father, David. Because the village could not provide enough tributes for the so-called "God of water" who protects the village. it sent the so-called divine punishment that drowned most of the villagers including George and my dad. I still remember the tears when my father begged us to escape while he said that this was his punishment for being unfaithful.