Slaire
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Hello everyone,
I am a new script writer of a visual novel, which is titled as "Watercolor." It's about a teenager who found himself wanting to go back to the place where he used to live, because of the alienation and humiliation he received while staying at his current house. Soon he will realize that he forgotten a lot of things about his childhood, and will try to figure those things out. The issue is that I'm always having a hard time to analyze the readability of my own writing (whether if they make sense or not) since I'm not a good English speaker and a storyteller.
Please help me out with the content readability and proper usage of tense!
* I used first-person narrative and it's in present tense.
The exposition is on its half way.
I am planning to convert it into a novel (or novelette), once the game is over. I hope you can spare some time to comment down your thoughts. It will be appreciated.
Here's a copy of my work:
I am a new script writer of a visual novel, which is titled as "Watercolor." It's about a teenager who found himself wanting to go back to the place where he used to live, because of the alienation and humiliation he received while staying at his current house. Soon he will realize that he forgotten a lot of things about his childhood, and will try to figure those things out. The issue is that I'm always having a hard time to analyze the readability of my own writing (whether if they make sense or not) since I'm not a good English speaker and a storyteller.
Please help me out with the content readability and proper usage of tense!
* I used first-person narrative and it's in present tense.
The exposition is on its half way.
I am planning to convert it into a novel (or novelette), once the game is over. I hope you can spare some time to comment down your thoughts. It will be appreciated.
Here's a copy of my work:
Watercolor.docx
drive.google.com