Looking for feedback on my story

yuheng3107

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Hi there, I'm a new writer but an old bookworm. I would really appreciate feedback and constructive criticism on my novel which can be found here. Thanks a lot!
 

Paraknight

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Hi there, I'm a new writer but an old bookworm. I would really appreciate feedback and constructive criticism on my novel which can be found here. Thanks a lot!

As for the plot, it's really hard to tell if it's good or not, since it's still at 2 chapters. But so far, you're doing good. Just becareful of the system thing, because it might backfire.
 
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