I really did forget! I think at the time you posted it, there was only one or two chapters, and then I floated off during the holidays and forgot about it. Also, I forgot about your story so I'll have to read it again
Also, how did you know I was translating?! Did I say that somewhere? I did start translating again, but I didn't think I told anyone....... XD
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- Synopsis:
- Court mage, witches, books, library, yes!
- I approve of short synopses. Short and sweet!
- Chapter 1
- A lot of sentence fragments, maybe stylistic.
- I like the first sentence but why is Young capitalized?
- Inconsistent tenses
- Lol Alina has secrets she can't remember
- The dry humor is very characteristic of Leti-san xD
- Ooof, honey XD
- I really enjoy Alina's frostiness and it's also kind of relatable in some ways.
- Chapter 2
- Very fluid reading. Relatable thoughts.
- XD Very funny reasoning
- Ooof the prince's straightforward response
- I really like how the prince casually asks to leave straight afterwards, it sort of exudes a sense of self-assuredness that is really attractive in its own way.
- Chapter 3
- This is great for characterizing Alina. I like it!
- Lol that was a fun ploy. Creative!
- Alina has a very lovable personality
- Chapter 4
- I think it's ironic that she reads a lot of romance novels
- Chapter 5
- Fire sprinkler? XD
- Huuuh it's the twin
- Chapter 6
I have absolutely zero criticisms! A lovely slice-of-life story that makes me smile with all the interactions. The characters are adorable, but Alina especially. There's a lot of room for further character development too, and I hope some interesting developments/twists occur too.
Prince Raimond is a bit bland right now. I'd like to see more development of the aspects of him lying and putting on an act... maybe something more interesting.
Is it weird that I want Alina to friendzone Raimond for the entire novel?
I feel like normally with these stories, you expect them to get together, but I really like the idea of a novel that explores a friendship with a romantic tilt on the periphery. It's actually pretty close to real life in some ways -- when a friend confesses but their feelings aren't reciprocated, yet they continue to be friends afterwards.
For me, the ideal trajectory of this story would sort of be one where Alina never reciprocates Prince Raimond (maybe she's asexual? aromantic?), yet the story continues to focus on their adventures together.
I feel like the tension of the story would completely evaporate if Alina ever said yes.
Also, I have a
fetish for being a minor character in the lives of people that I like. What I mean by this is that I think it would be nice to be part of the Prince's life yet not married to him. Idk, being the maid or librarian sounds nice. Basically, still be peripherally related to his life yet not be the main spouse because that seems stressful and annoying, and of course there are way better things that you can do when you're not in a relationship, since relationships can be a hassle too, and to some extent it seems mortifying to be married to someone with such a high public profile.