Frank-9976
surrealist shortform writer
- Joined
- Oct 13, 2022
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Nuts, the only reason I am on this website is because my friend uses it. But if I ever want to get better feedback perhaps I should consider moving sites, thank you for your suggestion. You are right, the comments even on my friend's quite successful series are still few and far between, let alone for my very small and niche work.Most readers on ScribbleHub are silent. For feedback, I bashfully and carefully recommend writing.com or WritersCafe. Both of those sites have point systems that encourage users to leave reviews.
If you want more comments here, consider making intentional mistakes and errors in your work. People love flaming and "correcting" them more than anything.Nuts, the only reason I am on this website is because my friend uses it. But if I ever want to get better feedback perhaps I should consider moving sites, thank you for your suggestion. You are right, the comments even on my friend's quite successful series are still few and far between, let alone for my very small and niche work.
Your son is wise ma'am.My son can see the color red, and he would like to say a few words . . .
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Thanks for your feedback! I think from the start I wanted to jump outside of Cody's POV but in retrospect maybe his consistent POV was what gave the otherwise crazy world some grounding. If I write another story I may try to stick to a single POV and use that one to hint at what is beyond instead of saying it explicitly.it's quite an unusual story with good writing. it has some nice twists and the ending is ok.
i do feel the setting can be fleshed out more, maybe to the point you know how the 'wtf' things actually makes sense. it can also be quite confusing at some parts due to the switching between POV's and realities.
also
i do feel that cody's experience in the first chapters may need some parallels in other POV (like Kire) to make more sense of what happened.
though it's probably not that important if you just want to focus on cody. maybe if you just stick to his POV the whole time it might be easier to understand and won't take much from the enjoyment.