MadmanRB
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I want to get feedback for my revised first chapter, as I want to see where I need to improve and if it's engaging enough to justify writing a chapter 2.
So first brief story synopsis and concept without plot spoilers:
This is an action/science fiction story with superhero elements, it is set on an alien world inhabited by a race of humanoid rabbits.
It's targeted at ages 7+
This is a complete overhaul of what I have on scribblehub so far, it's a new direction I am taking this, as the old draft is more like a screenplay and this more like a traditional novel.
Keep in mind in this chapter I had to set up my universe and its main characters and is by far the longest chapter of this story as it needs to do so much.
It's 4414 words and is 8 pages long in libreoffice but understandable for what it needs to do.
I am uploading it at this state as I do want feedback, it's unlikely to be my final draft but in any case your feedback will help steer the course for what comes next.
For now, it's on my Google Drive as opposed to scribblehub, if successful I will load it proper once I write more chapters.
So first brief story synopsis and concept without plot spoilers:
This is an action/science fiction story with superhero elements, it is set on an alien world inhabited by a race of humanoid rabbits.
It's targeted at ages 7+
This is a complete overhaul of what I have on scribblehub so far, it's a new direction I am taking this, as the old draft is more like a screenplay and this more like a traditional novel.
Keep in mind in this chapter I had to set up my universe and its main characters and is by far the longest chapter of this story as it needs to do so much.
It's 4414 words and is 8 pages long in libreoffice but understandable for what it needs to do.
I am uploading it at this state as I do want feedback, it's unlikely to be my final draft but in any case your feedback will help steer the course for what comes next.
For now, it's on my Google Drive as opposed to scribblehub, if successful I will load it proper once I write more chapters.
New Draft 1
docs.google.com
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