killwrites
Need motivation
- Joined
- Sep 11, 2021
- Messages
- 126
- Points
- 83
I'm just gonna preface this by saying that I have very little experience writing explicit R-18 scenes. Usually I draw the line at kissing and teasing, but for a future chapter I'm writing such a scene between two secondary characters (both girls) and since this isn't my forte at all, I'm hoping that others can help me review how realistic is it and how can I improve.
It's in the spoilers below
It's in the spoilers below
Zhu'er shivered, not from fright, but from the overwhelming passion and pleasure that flared up to envelop her in heat and need. Totally helpless against her master’s fervent appeal, she shifted and rubbed her thighs together—suddenly conscious of a burning sensation running through her already throbbing body.
“Ara, aren’t you one naughty girl?” She smiled teasingly as she traced the outline of her breasts through the silky fabric of her brocade dress. “What if I touched…here?” She slowly moved her finger across the outline of her aroused nipples in tender strokes.
Zhu’er quivered and moaned softly at her touch. “Shi niang-niang…this…I…I can’t…”
“You can’t?” She kissed Zhu’er, gently at first, then with her tongue in her mouth, laving and stroking the insides of her mouth lasciviously.
Zhu’er gasped nimbly as her master’s tongue found hers. Wrapping her arms around her master, she pressed her body tightly against hers and urged their kiss harder, deeper.
“Touch me.” Slipping her silk robe off her shoulders, she took her hand and placed it on her swollen breasts.
Zhu’er complied, caressing her breasts ever so tenderly. She then lowered her lips down on her right nipple, sucking it gently and using her tongue to lick her rosy soft areola. With her other hand, she circled her left nipple with her nails and pinched it lightly, rolling it under her finger before cupping her breast and fondling it with her hand.
A wave of delight engulfed her in an instant. This was what she wanted—something the all-too-eager men she entertained as a courtesan never managed to comprehend. Moaning in pure euphoria, she gracefully opened her legs and guided Zhu’er to her already-wet nether regions.
Zhu’er, as expected of a fast learner, laid down and rubbed her moist clitoris gently. Her hands were cold as she pressed her delicate fingers on the hot skin of her vulva—the delicious contrast in temperature shot immense white hot pleasure through her folds. Then, Zhu’er moved closer and kissed her clitoris passionately.
Tremors ran through her body with each slow lick. She arched her back in ecstasy as Zhu’er proceeded to insert her tongue into her swollen lips while teasing her clitoris with her thumb, alternating between soft and hard rubs. Her nipples became hard and tingled, her clitoris felt like it was on fire, and sheer sexual desire overcame her. She wrapped her legs around Zhu’er—spurring her on with her own hip movements—and demanded more and more until the intense pulsing of her nub had almost reached a crescendo. She threw her head back and shoved her vulva harder against her tongue, desperate for the sweet, sweet release of her hot, soaked center.
“Haah...haah...hah...ah...ah-ah-AH!” Her body wound up tight, tight, tight—then released all its tension in an explosion. Her body convulsed against her servant as she spasmed in climax.
Everything seemed to come to a standstill except for the rising and falling of her chest, which was accompanied by harsh, panting breaths after her orgasm.
Zhu’er sat up and slowly kissed and nibbled on her neck, letting out a small whimper of frustration as she looked at her master with pleading eyes.
“Ara, aren’t you one naughty girl?” She smiled teasingly as she traced the outline of her breasts through the silky fabric of her brocade dress. “What if I touched…here?” She slowly moved her finger across the outline of her aroused nipples in tender strokes.
Zhu’er quivered and moaned softly at her touch. “Shi niang-niang…this…I…I can’t…”
“You can’t?” She kissed Zhu’er, gently at first, then with her tongue in her mouth, laving and stroking the insides of her mouth lasciviously.
Zhu’er gasped nimbly as her master’s tongue found hers. Wrapping her arms around her master, she pressed her body tightly against hers and urged their kiss harder, deeper.
“Touch me.” Slipping her silk robe off her shoulders, she took her hand and placed it on her swollen breasts.
Zhu’er complied, caressing her breasts ever so tenderly. She then lowered her lips down on her right nipple, sucking it gently and using her tongue to lick her rosy soft areola. With her other hand, she circled her left nipple with her nails and pinched it lightly, rolling it under her finger before cupping her breast and fondling it with her hand.
A wave of delight engulfed her in an instant. This was what she wanted—something the all-too-eager men she entertained as a courtesan never managed to comprehend. Moaning in pure euphoria, she gracefully opened her legs and guided Zhu’er to her already-wet nether regions.
Zhu’er, as expected of a fast learner, laid down and rubbed her moist clitoris gently. Her hands were cold as she pressed her delicate fingers on the hot skin of her vulva—the delicious contrast in temperature shot immense white hot pleasure through her folds. Then, Zhu’er moved closer and kissed her clitoris passionately.
Tremors ran through her body with each slow lick. She arched her back in ecstasy as Zhu’er proceeded to insert her tongue into her swollen lips while teasing her clitoris with her thumb, alternating between soft and hard rubs. Her nipples became hard and tingled, her clitoris felt like it was on fire, and sheer sexual desire overcame her. She wrapped her legs around Zhu’er—spurring her on with her own hip movements—and demanded more and more until the intense pulsing of her nub had almost reached a crescendo. She threw her head back and shoved her vulva harder against her tongue, desperate for the sweet, sweet release of her hot, soaked center.
“Haah...haah...hah...ah...ah-ah-AH!” Her body wound up tight, tight, tight—then released all its tension in an explosion. Her body convulsed against her servant as she spasmed in climax.
Everything seemed to come to a standstill except for the rising and falling of her chest, which was accompanied by harsh, panting breaths after her orgasm.
Zhu’er sat up and slowly kissed and nibbled on her neck, letting out a small whimper of frustration as she looked at her master with pleading eyes.