Avery_Moore
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Hi guys! So I've written a short Choose Your Own Adventure Game set in Ancient Rome, and would be really great if I could get some feedback on it. I'm planning a sequel and it would be great to get some ideas on how I could improve. Also if anybody could let me know if they find any mistakes or bugs or other things that could be improved in the game, I'd really appreciate it.
Here's the synopsis:
You are ten years old when you first feel the weight of shackles around your wrists. In a matter of hours, your whole world is turned upside down as you and your brother are dragged away from your home in Greece to work as slaves in the Roman Empire. Now you must struggle for survival. Every decision you make will affect your future. Your life, the life of your brother and the lives of your friends are in your hands.
Begin your journey as a child, and make heartbreaking choices that will shape the adult you will become. But be careful. An act of kindness might come back to haunt you, and a thoughtless word could earn you some powerful enemies. A split second decision will determine who lives and who dies. Will you sell your soul to win your freedom, or sacrifice everything for the people you love? Will you even live long enough to see the sun rise?
And here's the link. (Sorry, it's not actually on scribblehub, because that doesn't have all the tech and stuff I need for CYOA stories. Hope that's okay.) ^_^
Here's the synopsis:
You are ten years old when you first feel the weight of shackles around your wrists. In a matter of hours, your whole world is turned upside down as you and your brother are dragged away from your home in Greece to work as slaves in the Roman Empire. Now you must struggle for survival. Every decision you make will affect your future. Your life, the life of your brother and the lives of your friends are in your hands.
Begin your journey as a child, and make heartbreaking choices that will shape the adult you will become. But be careful. An act of kindness might come back to haunt you, and a thoughtless word could earn you some powerful enemies. A split second decision will determine who lives and who dies. Will you sell your soul to win your freedom, or sacrifice everything for the people you love? Will you even live long enough to see the sun rise?
And here's the link. (Sorry, it's not actually on scribblehub, because that doesn't have all the tech and stuff I need for CYOA stories. Hope that's okay.) ^_^