Need some Expert opinions...

[Bossypants]

So, I've only just started putting my fanfiction on here, and I was wondering if anybody wanted to give it a read and tell me what they think! It's not done yet, but at the rate I am finishing chapters, it will be soon.

Thanks!

A Soldier’s Harmony

Army Ranger Sergeant Dean Forester, an RSTF operator, is sent on a mission to retake and destroy a secret lab now belonging to Humanities mortal enemy: The Orith. After everything goes wrong for himself and his squad, Dean is sent through an experimental wormhole on the verge of death to...

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(link to story. Don't let the description turn you away, it is an action filled book, not focused on romance to much)

 

[Mandark]

I’m not an expert, and I only read 8 chapters of your book.

Firstly, I find your writing style very good ( much better than the average webnovel). You have great sentence structure with clear and easy to understand descriptions. You are also good at writing transitions (or scene changes? - I’m not sure the correct wording for that).

I’m not really interested in the setting of your work, and so despite it being easy to read it never grabbed me.

Lastly, I think you will be successful if you keep going.