Rate my novels' readability

[Yomo.Kinoshi]

I'm looking for opinions.
Which style is more readable in these novels?
Ulquiorra’s Other World Journey to Supremacy
Modern Life of the Exalted Immortal

 

[BenJepheneT]

provide a synopsis. not a critique, just a tip. just slotting two links and a request to read your stuff isn't convincing anyone to do so. if you want our effort, show us yours first.

 

[Hathnuz]

Second one. I personally dislike one sentence paragraphs in the first one.