released a chapter and would like to ask for a reader's opinion on it. (fantasy, isekai)

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As I stated in the title I wrote a new chapter and would like to know y'all's opinion on it. Background information isn't really necessary. To keep it short: MC, the oldest brother of five used a spell above his level, a teleportation spell. It failed and yeeted each of his siblings into different places of the world.

here is the link for the chapter in question.

I'm fine with any opinion/feedback ranging from I lost interest in the first paragraph to wall of text to nah fam that shit is mid or bland

Spatial magus - 29. A young and tender child. What more could I ask for?~ | Scribble Hub

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