E.M.Kaustinen
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- Aug 7, 2022
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Thanks for the feedback! I am definitely working on making it more captivating in the beginning, but I also decided to do a slow build-up to get to the more interesting part of the story knowing that it would not fit to everyone's taste (The twist comes at the end of chapter 4). There was also a lot of things I revealed in the first chapter that I leave up to the reader's interpretation and will reveal its significance later on, but I understand that makes the first chapter a bit less impactful than it should be. I am currently, and slowly—because of school, work, and life—editing my story. Hopefully, it makes it a bit more enjoyable to read from the beginning. Still, thanks for giving it a read and I hope you have a great week!Well, it's alright. The beginning baby pov was a bit jarring, but a nice quirk. Not a lot of people write the way the character would think like at the time.
As for story itself, it's just okay. I didn't really feel like reading the next chapter, although that is probably because of my very narrow tastes, but there is still a need to work on captivating the reader more.
In numbers, this would be a solid 6-7 / 10. Not something I'd read for any long period of time, but others might enjoy it.