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Soo....
Show, not tell
Is a famous tip to give to people here.
Like, everyone knows it, if they don't, we have plenty of people to inform them of this marvelous fact.
It's almost the basic foundation of any screenwriting.
However, lately, I have been seeing some authors who are a bit too leaned on in the show part.
Show, not tell
We assume that the person hasn't been following this. What I mean is, this advice is relative, and not absolute.
It's like saying, "Drive slower around schools."
I am assuming your normal speed is like 40mph/60kmph(I don't know how maths work)
You need not follow this if your normal speed is already like 5mph/15kmph.
Notice I say need not? I mean, of course you did, I specifically underlined it to make you notice it.
It's like perfume, sure, you can apply it 24/7, but you need not. You can just apply it whenever necessary.
So, every story, and every scene requires a balance between show and tell.
Take a look at an example,
Let's say you were writing a cooking novel, Food Wars type.
MC has left his dorm for the first day at academy.
Which one of these fit better in this scenario?
Or~~
Alright, so,
Second option is very beautiful, I admit.
It creates a vivid image, increases immersivness, and is just so relaxing.
But, just like perfume, ask yourself,
"Do you really want this much vividness, throughout the work?"
Like, use such effort when the actual cooking takes place, sure.
Use those big words and open your thesaurus and just those metaphors you learnt while doing your masters.
But, you need not.
I mean, if you wanna, sure.
But it will lead in a cooking novel in which cooking hasn't happened yet and reader is like 5 chapters in.
Not to mention, it's also exhausting.
Like, soooo exhausting!
You will find yourself to run out of words.
[The sky is beautiful, it looks marvelous, the clouds have this wonderfully amusing shape]
And there, I have run out of all words I know.
If I were to continue now, it would be,
[And the colour as the sun sets is simply wonderful. The nearby fountain reflects its and the ripples form a marvelous piece of art. As I walked by, I saw some marvelous children who were very wonderful and marvelously played football while amusing themselves]
.....okay, no i think this one is a me problem....
But anyhow, many authors prefer to have a slow start.
Like, we all are pretty much desensitized by the isekai where MC kills a bear in the first chapter, so yes, we all appreciate a slow isekai. So..
Like, do you.
This isn't to tell you to do absolutely this. Experiment and learn, and just keep in mind show isn't the only tool you have
Show, not tell
Is a famous tip to give to people here.
Like, everyone knows it, if they don't, we have plenty of people to inform them of this marvelous fact.
It's almost the basic foundation of any screenwriting.
However, lately, I have been seeing some authors who are a bit too leaned on in the show part.
Show, not tell
We assume that the person hasn't been following this. What I mean is, this advice is relative, and not absolute.
It's like saying, "Drive slower around schools."
I am assuming your normal speed is like 40mph/60kmph(I don't know how maths work)
You need not follow this if your normal speed is already like 5mph/15kmph.
Notice I say need not? I mean, of course you did, I specifically underlined it to make you notice it.
It's like perfume, sure, you can apply it 24/7, but you need not. You can just apply it whenever necessary.
So, every story, and every scene requires a balance between show and tell.
Take a look at an example,
Let's say you were writing a cooking novel, Food Wars type.
MC has left his dorm for the first day at academy.
Which one of these fit better in this scenario?
I walked to the academy as fast as I could.
Or~~
I walked down the stairs, filled with enthusiasm and excitement for the new day. A new life even. Sun shone brightly and the skies were clear, a beautiful hue of blue, deep and mesmerising. Every step I take reminds me that this isn't a dream, and I simply couldn't help but giggle at fate.
It was still about half an hour before the lessons start, but I wanted to go there early just in case.
In between of the garden, I saw the old gardener, Simon hunched on his back. It was still spring, so the patch was barren other than the few sproutings here and there.
"Hello there uncle," I waved at him with a gleeful smile.
He turned around, and was equally happy to see me, "Oh! MC kun, how nice to see you. Isn't it too early though?"
Uncle Simon was a man in his forties, but he was still in incredible shape, with a body that could surely tear down a tree without needing an axe.
He was wearing a white tank top, which had started to become yellow, and wore blue jorts, shabbily made. Knowing uncle Simon, he probably tore the cloth with his own hands, finding using scissors to be too troublesome.
"Ah, yes, but I was actually to excited to stay in my room, so..."
My voice trailed at the end, but it seemed uncle Simon understood,
"It really is nice to be young. You remind me of my first visit to my in laws. I was too nervous to even sleep. Kept tossing and turning the entire time."
-To be continued
It was still about half an hour before the lessons start, but I wanted to go there early just in case.
In between of the garden, I saw the old gardener, Simon hunched on his back. It was still spring, so the patch was barren other than the few sproutings here and there.
"Hello there uncle," I waved at him with a gleeful smile.
He turned around, and was equally happy to see me, "Oh! MC kun, how nice to see you. Isn't it too early though?"
Uncle Simon was a man in his forties, but he was still in incredible shape, with a body that could surely tear down a tree without needing an axe.
He was wearing a white tank top, which had started to become yellow, and wore blue jorts, shabbily made. Knowing uncle Simon, he probably tore the cloth with his own hands, finding using scissors to be too troublesome.
"Ah, yes, but I was actually to excited to stay in my room, so..."
My voice trailed at the end, but it seemed uncle Simon understood,
"It really is nice to be young. You remind me of my first visit to my in laws. I was too nervous to even sleep. Kept tossing and turning the entire time."
-To be continued
Alright, so,
Second option is very beautiful, I admit.
It creates a vivid image, increases immersivness, and is just so relaxing.
But, just like perfume, ask yourself,
"Do you really want this much vividness, throughout the work?"
Like, use such effort when the actual cooking takes place, sure.
Use those big words and open your thesaurus and just those metaphors you learnt while doing your masters.
But, you need not.
I mean, if you wanna, sure.
But it will lead in a cooking novel in which cooking hasn't happened yet and reader is like 5 chapters in.
Not to mention, it's also exhausting.
Like, soooo exhausting!
You will find yourself to run out of words.
[The sky is beautiful, it looks marvelous, the clouds have this wonderfully amusing shape]
And there, I have run out of all words I know.
If I were to continue now, it would be,
[And the colour as the sun sets is simply wonderful. The nearby fountain reflects its and the ripples form a marvelous piece of art. As I walked by, I saw some marvelous children who were very wonderful and marvelously played football while amusing themselves]
.....okay, no i think this one is a me problem....
But anyhow, many authors prefer to have a slow start.
Like, we all are pretty much desensitized by the isekai where MC kills a bear in the first chapter, so yes, we all appreciate a slow isekai. So..
Like, do you.
This isn't to tell you to do absolutely this. Experiment and learn, and just keep in mind show isn't the only tool you have