Freesia.Cutepearl
Nonsensically Weird while Weirdly Nonsensical
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I just did some editing on my Synopsis, and rewrote a decent portion of it, including re-arranging the first sentence to fit neatly before the "Read More" prompt.
It got me thinking, about what makes up a good synopsis, and how much information should be included. Where is the line between spoiler and summary so someone knows what to expect? How long should one be? Lots of questions that are probably ambiguous with answers that likely vary from story to story.
I'm curious to see other's opinions. I'm not really sure enough myself to have any yet.
If you're curious here is my original one, followed by the new updated one.
It got me thinking, about what makes up a good synopsis, and how much information should be included. Where is the line between spoiler and summary so someone knows what to expect? How long should one be? Lots of questions that are probably ambiguous with answers that likely vary from story to story.
I'm curious to see other's opinions. I'm not really sure enough myself to have any yet.
If you're curious here is my original one, followed by the new updated one.
Original said:Taylor was born a Man, but wanted desperately to be a beautiful Woman. Aside from this, she was living an average life, working an average office job, saving up money trying to achieve her dreams.
However political strife, combined with prejudice, veiled with ‘public safety’ as an excuse would turn a routine grocery store stop, into a brutal murder when all she wanted to do was use the bathroom.
Taylor’s tormented spirit has an encounter with the so-called ‘Goddess of Death’ who identifies herself as Izanami. Given a second chance at a life, in exchange for ‘serving’ her, she cautiously accepts and finds herself transported to a new world where she’s become a ‘Vampiric Succubus’.
While some elements seem right out of an RPG game others are ambiguous or more realistic. Even though she has some powerful abilities, and a few ‘cheat’ type skills, she learns quickly that this world is not a game, after succumbing to her emotions and putting herself in a vulnerable position she is forced to fight, killing for the first time while narrowly escaping the encounter.
Now she must deal with her emotions, reconcile her relationship with death, life, and love, while exploring a completely strange world, where despite her ‘cheat’ skills, she can’t speak, read, or write the language, until she learns it the hard way.
Version 2 said:Born a Man, but desperately wanting to be a beautiful Woman, Taylor was living an average life, at an average office job, saving money to achieve her dreams. Until she was Murdered.
Brutally murdered by a prejudiced group of people whose hate was fueled by transphobic rhetoric and misinformation, for simply trying to use the women's bathroom, her tormented spirit has an encounter with the so-called ‘Goddess of Death’ who identifies herself as Izanami.
Cautiously accepting an offer for a second life, where her heart's desire as a Woman will be granted, in exchange for serving Izanami in some as of yet unspecified way, Taylor finds herself transported to a new world where she’s become a ‘Vampiric Succubus’.
Some elements seem right out of an RPG game, others are ambiguous or more realistic, she has some powerful abilities, and a few ‘cheat’ type skills, accompanied by emotional trauma from her Murder. After succumbing to her emotions and putting herself in a vulnerable position she is forced to fight, killing for the first time while narrowly escaping the encounter.
This new world is not a game, she must learn to take it seriously if she wishes to survive. Dealing with her emotions, and reconciling her relationship with death, life, and love, while exploring a completely strange world, where despite her ‘cheat’ skills, she can’t speak, read, or write the language, until she learns it the hard way.
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This is my first attempt at writing a story. Check the Forward for details. Thank you for looking at my story, have a wonderful day! ^.^