um... from my experience, If your mom doesn't catch you drawing hentai, you are gold.
Try mixing sceneries and stuff here and there as it can help you get a nice change of pace
Um... can I read it? I don't know the requirements of a professional beta reader, but hey, if you want to know about my honest opinion then I would like to vote myself to read a good story before anyone else ( I am assuming since I haven't read the previous version.)