Recent content by E.M.Kaustinen

Thanks for your feedback and the google docs! I have gone to a lot of forums asking for feedback and now I have a good idea of my pitfalls as a writer. You definitely gave me a lot of new feedback that is very helpful. As of chapter 9, I have decided to take a hiatus so I can revise the first...

Thanks for the feedback! I am definitely working on making it more captivating in the beginning, but I also decided to do a slow build-up to get to the more interesting part of the story knowing that it would not fit to everyone's taste (The twist comes at the end of chapter 4). There was also a...

May you do the review, please? I am currently fixing the issues with my tenses, but I am still curious to see what you think with how the story is now. The Conqueror's Sister

Thanks, I appreciate that! Also, I have been tinkering a little bit with my story. Changing tenses and stuff, and I am definitely now leaning towards changing it all to past tense. A lot of what I have been hearing about my story is that Zaya starts to have too advanced internal thoughts for...

I definitely see what you are saying and thanks for that link! It was really interesting. I will have to think about it because soon here I am going to do a large editing of each of my chapters so far. I have been learning where my story and writing is lacking and I want to improve it before I...

Thanks! Tenses are one of my struggles, and I am trying to fix it. I don't know why but when I write, my mind switches between thinking in present to thinking in past so I don't notice when I switch between them in my writing. Eventually I am going to take the time to reread through everything I...

Thanks for the feedback! I will definitely work on the character's voice. I admit I messed up a bit there and am going to strive to fix that. Also, I understand your second point, and I could argue against it, but I won't because that is not what this thread is for. It's your opinion and most...

Hello, thanks for the feedback! It helped me realize that I forgot to add something to the beginning of the first chapter that I thought I had put there. The thing being that in this world there are 15 months of a calendar year, so the math would end up being 6+8+0.5+11+15+17 = ~57.5. Making...

Can you take a look at mine too please? I want all the feedback! The Conqueror's Sister

Here is fine, thanks!

I am interested to see what you like or dislike about my story! The Conqueror's Sister

I am interested to see what you think of my first chapter too. It is probably the most stylistic chapter of my story so far. The Conqueror's Sister

This is my first time asking for feedback on a forum. Thought I would give it a shot since the only feedback I have been given is from people I know. I would like an unbiased opinion, so here I am. This is my story: The Conqueror's Sister 1. I want to say an on-site review, but I have not...