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The Spanish name for Hamburg Germany is Hamburgo

Review is on the RR Thread. RATING: Would not Keep Reading. In a word: Structure. In more words, I think it gets confused and...

RATING: Would not Keep Reading. SECTION 1 You have a lot of inconsequential sentences in the first half or just poorly thought out...

Thank you! I agree with your feedback. I was trying (failing) to pace the scene utilizing more words in some places, and then making the...

Where is the weekend (;.;)

Ah. I assumed it was discord related, like maybe a timeout after x amount of years or something.

Signature fixed. no idea what happened in the first place.

RATING: Would Keep Reading THE GOOD A lot of the writing was well done. I thought you did a good job of drawing your reader in once...

Thanks for letting me know. They weren't working for me, but I figured it was my ad blocker or something.

Finally hung up my screen screen again only to take it down and throw it in the wash (I kicked a liter of choclate milk into it...

You can: 1) Try and edit like I outlined here. Look at every word, pick it up, examine it. Decide what you need. Decide what is there...

RATING: Would not Keep Reading. Honestly, it just comes down to the prose here. It's very wordy and constantly longer than it should...

If you're going to critize someone's work with technical terms, get them right. A clause has a noun and a verb. A phrase does not.

"Alright, what kind of person is Joshua - a kid, an outlaw, a world traveling con-artist, a quasi-depressed teen, and a very considerate...

Doing some review swaps off site and got feedback with someone very angry. Stupid angry. But I want him to write the back cover for me...