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What you suggested actually sounds good as well. I'll keep it in mind, thanks.

Yep

Damn, that's actually a cool idea. Thanks!

Sort of, it's classwork, we don't get any grades out of it, but we have to participate if we don't want to embarrass ourselves. I don't have to participate either, but I saw it as a way to get some practice. We have plan B just in case, but we'd rather have a coherent story.

The theme of the story is 'togetherness', but the characters can't interact with one another nor talk. They could interact through video calls, but that's about it. It can't be long either, it has to be filmable through 4 mins. I am near the end of my rope here, any suggestions would be appreciated.

Do you mean the ending with the rat legs? If it isn't, I'd like to know. The rat legs part was intentional since I'm planning it to be a Lovecraftian-esque type of story. Though I doubt I could actually scare anyone. Thanks for the critique btw, have a nice day chief.

https://docs.google.com/document/u/2/d/e/2PACX-1vR4EGMAWrrKqN7PUB5xcdZBglqIGFitb8Idq3oJarn16OAbIGX--J37VZRmQtOpFFq74H5D_WvSPdrH/pub I was originally planning to publish this in scribble hub right away. But I don't want to publish something that is doomed from the start. This is my first novel...

I had to reread some parts multiple times cause I found it to be going too fast. But, other than that I enjoyed it a lot, especially the writing. Keep it up chief. You were offering to critique as well, yes? I wrote this thing on a whim and it's the first story I've ever written. But please...

Pilipino ka? Well, first of all, the sentences of your synopsis were too long. Trying splitting it up into multiple parts. I'm a beginner myself, so take my advice with a grain of salt. Your sentences sound unnatural to me and are way too detailed. I found your choice of words to be weird, to...