Sylver
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The latest chapter in my story introduced the first argument between the main characters. I'll give you the TLDR of the story so far.
During a bad storm, a lonely farmer named Felix finds an unconscious cat and takes her into his home. Or well, he's a caretaker but the owner is away. She is a cat girl in disguise named KuliKuli, but suffers from memory loss so he decides to let her stay and cares for her. The two develop a relationship and fall in love, while making some new friends on the way.
Now the start of this chapter is the conclusion of a catastrophic field trip where their friend, Janette, invited them into a nearby city to get out more and visit a circus. It did not go well. A lot happened and they freed a Monster Girl from captivity. The cat girl (KuliKuli) invited her to their home to hide and be safe but her partner (Felix) rejected that offer.
So this chapter is where this loving pair vent their frustrations at each other and have a fight for the first time. It's my first novel and I've been writing it in a slice of life format with drama and romance, but there's been this underlying mystery behind KuliKuli's past that looms around like a dark cloud in an otherwise sunny day. I would like your feedback on this chapter to see if the argument works well, or if it's silly. I rarely get comments and I've been working on increasing my overall stats, but it's been really slow.
I greatly appreciate your time and feedback. Let me know if it's written well or needs improvement and how, there is no wrong feedback here. Just a writer trying to see if she's doing okay in her content.