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  1. Motsu

    Author Things #1

    Thank you, guys. I will see which approach is better!
  2. Motsu

    Author Things #1

    Have you ever thought about a story and understood what happens, but then felt stuck trying to figure out how to get there? It happens to me sometimes. How do you make the story flow smoothly without making the writing process difficult? Let's say you have a clear image in your mind of two...
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    Motsu's free editing and feedback thread!

    I read your prologue and here is my take on it: The story suffers from one-dimensional characters lacking depth, inconsistent tone shifts, unrealistic reactions, unclear transitions, and an unsatisfying resolution. It heavily relies on telling rather than showing, leading to a lack of emotional...
  4. Motsu

    How to show the authors why readers are kings:

    Then it's time to change tactics in order for readers to become kings. It's time for authors to become the puppet!
  5. Motsu

    How to show the authors why readers are kings:

    It was not about the time you've wasted. It's about the message.
  6. Motsu

    How to show the authors why readers are kings:

    it turns out godzilla's own weakness is being an illiterate, no wonder why he choke on his own saliva
  7. Motsu

    How to show the authors why readers are kings:

    it already says in the name now i am gonna make a pirate whose gonna steal trashes there
  8. Motsu

    How to show the authors why readers are kings:

    Create an algorithm that rates stories for 1 star and spams :blob_cookie::blob_cookie: And that, my folks, is how you become kings and the most amazing scum king in the world!
  9. Motsu

    Note to self...

  10. Motsu

    Note to self...

    uwu uwu uwu uwu oh hail the lord copium
  11. Motsu

    Note to self...

    The people in the library reading this thread:
  12. Motsu

    Note to self...

    Bury the lighttttttttttttttttttttttttttttttttttttttttttttttttttt
  13. Motsu

    Note to self...

    *typing got em
  14. Motsu

    Note to self...

    Sussy baka
  15. Motsu

    Note to self...

    My writing is a personal expression of my thoughts and emotions, bringing me joy and fulfillment. I write for myself, not for the approval or validation of others. Writing is my sanctuary, a place where I can escape and find happiness within my own words. I trust in my unique voice and believe...
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    Motsu's free editing and feedback thread!

    Apologies ⊂⁠(⁠•⁠‿⁠•⁠⊂⁠ ⁠)⁠*⁠.⁠✧ Its my auto correction
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    Motsu's free editing and feedback thread!

    Chapter 1: Your story is captivating and engaging, with an intriguing premise centered around pyromancers and the Red Sky Covenant organization. The dialogue and action scenes add depth and excitement to the plot, showcasing the protagonist's well-thought-out strategy against Agantha. However...
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    Motsu's free editing and feedback thread!

    First of all, this is hard to read. Not only is the top-bottom line spacing compact, but the paragraphs themselves have been bundled together. The story could benefit from clearer paragraph breaks and indentation to make it easier to read. Each new speaker should have a new paragraph to avoid...
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    Motsu's free editing and feedback thread!

    I am back! whopper whopper whopper whopper triple double double junior
  20. Motsu

    Writing Preliminary to a Good Story

    I can't read snake language hss hss hss hss
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