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You may. But I feel like I was pretty explicit in breaking down the technical issues. May start by googling the definition of an independant clause and a run on sentence. RATING: Would keep reading THE GOOD Honestly pretty much all of it. You have a stellar character voice. The writing is...

I've decided that I'm good at my job

Dried oatmeal on spoons is heinous

Signature! Where do I host a photo now? Discord keeps breaking and imgur doesn't work at all.

Turns out I'm super lactose intollerant

Digging the new title I've aquired. RATING: Back to Basics Another one of these were I call it quits off the bat. Let's look at your first sentence (?): My name is Kiyoshi, Male, I am 18 years old, Iam Just Your everyday Passerby, And I think i lived a very good life—at least, that's what I...

Rating: Would not Keep Reading. Honestly I've got a lot of these to do so I read your first paragraph and called it quits: 1. Somewhere in the deep forest, Iris is standing still. 2. In front of her is an old and musty castle. 3. She crossed the gigantic gateway with her frost-white horse. 4...

RATING: Middle of the Road so Would not Keep Reading THE GOOD The prose was pretty good. Especially coming off a "first time author" post. You write fine, weave in additional information that fleshes out the characters and the scene. You also have a lot of elements going on in the space...

I don't remember the last eclipse messing with my brain that much. The tint is messing with my brain.

The Spanish name for Hamburg Germany is Hamburgo

Review is on the RR Thread. RATING: Would not Keep Reading. In a word: Structure. In more words, I think it gets confused and unfoncused. You have this general idea of lucid dreams, but going forward that can apparently just be anything. THE GOOD: At the start, I was very entertained...

RATING: Would not Keep Reading. SECTION 1 You have a lot of inconsequential sentences in the first half or just poorly thought out sentences. Especially as we get towards the the truck scene, it starts to feel overly repetitive and contradictory. I also think we need a lot more from this...

Where is the weekend (;.;)

Signature fixed. no idea what happened in the first place.

RATING: Would Keep Reading THE GOOD A lot of the writing was well done. I thought you did a good job of drawing your reader in once the chapter got going. And it's a weird sort of compliment to give around here, but I really like the way your formatted the chapter. Yeah the bold was cool, but...

Finally hung up my screen screen again only to take it down and throw it in the wash (I kicked a liter of choclate milk into it (accidently))