I rewrote my first chapter to be more concise. Can anyone give it a go? Need feedback.
https://www.scribblehub.com/series/287122/midnight-guard-tales-of-loz/
As the title says, here my story:
https://www.scribblehub.com/series/287122/midnight-guard-tales-of-loz/
I wish for some feedback, opinions, and things I could fix.
I have a verified email and all.
Yet, when I've rated a story 5 stars. It remains at 0 stars and it won't change whatever I do.
Can someone close or delete this? I did a big dum here, and now I'm ashamed.