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  1. KaiArgenti

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    Pretty much.
  2. KaiArgenti

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    If you're asking about what knocked him out, that's something that is revealed later. But is eluded to in chapter 3.
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    ... I don't know what you mean. All I said was, "Thanks for the feedback! I THINK the main reason you were so confused was that you thought it was an isekai. It isn't." And then I tried to help you understand. It's DEFINITELY VERY CONFUSING and may need several reads to fully understand it. I...
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    That could've happened. Kari was about to ask Tea about it but he stopped himself (for reasons he explained). But from seeing how Tea wasn't harmed in any way, that specific thought of an accident didn't cross his mind.
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    "Memories of the night before flashed through my mind. Tea was driving along the narrow, windy, mountain road that led here and I saw a light in the corner of my eye. A light so welcoming and familiar that the urge of jumping out of the speeding car to reach it came over me. But instead, it...
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    "Would not keep reading. In many ways, this is a new experience for me. Good or bad, I always GET what's going on. Even when I get the most inane trash, I can see the template and the influences the author was going for and puzzle it out. But I'm a little lost. And I want to be clear on this...
  7. KaiArgenti

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    Thanks for the feedback! I THINK the main reason you were so confused was that you thought it was an isekai. It isn't.
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    Rip me a new one (please don't). https://www.scribblehub.com/series/430768/raven-black/
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