Any tips or feedback in my story

[Rival]

https://www.scribblehub.com/series/9067/the-transcendence-of-an-otaku/
Thanks for any help!

 

[mrsimple]

https://www.scribblehub.com/series/9067/the-transcendence-of-an-otaku/
Thanks for any help!

Just to let ya know, so far I've read the first and second chapter, but your third chapter is very difficult to read with the site in its dark theme mode. There are going to be readers who won't like blinding themselves by switching their theme back onto the light side for a quick read.

I'll letcha know more once I read everything. ;)

Added edit: You might want to highlight or make the status information/choices stand out and away from the story's narrative. Give it some flare for being a "system" notice.