Feedback for new sci-fi fantasy [Litrpg]

[Spilled_Soup]

I had a dream a while back while playing Cyberpunk 2077. It kept rattling around in my head until I decided to grab my MC and plug him into Google Docs. And that is how Spark of the Revenant was born. A blend between Mass effect and a dash Cyberpunk—my two favorite games.

Spark of the Revenant is a Litrpg about a netrunner whose AI gets copied into his new "Force" powers.

I've written 11chs and am looking for feedback. Also If anyone is interested Beta reading let me know.

Spark of the Revenant

In the far corners of the multiverse, anarchy reigns supreme. Entire sectors are dominated by smugglers and raiders vying for control over an ancient energy source that grants supernatural abilities alongside levels and stats. On a seemingly normal day, Eon, a hacker, comes in contact with...

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[Erys]

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[TheEldritchGod]

It doesn't strike me as very LitRPG. It's more of a... well... just a story. I'm not seeing the game mechanics. You are basing it off games, sure, but it doesn't seem like a GAME. It doesn't seem like a literal RPG. At the very least I need a character sheet, but even then I just lump most of those in with cultivation. I expect rules abuse in my LitRPG.

 

[Spilled_Soup]

It doesn't strike me as very LitRPG. It's more of a... well... just a story. I'm not seeing the game mechanics. You are basing it off games, sure, but it doesn't seem like a GAME. It doesn't seem like a literal RPG. At the very least I need a character sheet, but even then I just lump most of those in with cultivation. I expect rules abuse in my LitRPG.

All of that is in there, but it's after the prologue