Lorelliad
call me Roamer 🎩
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I've been writing a separate story for a while now. This one's a slower pace than I'm used to, but I'm interested to see how it goes. So far, I'm loving it. Anyway, I need a feedback on this synopsis. Or don't, and just have a cookie for viewing.
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Before a fledgeling can officially call themselves a true Yriah, one must first undertake a Vow. Each of Antoria's inhabitants perceive them differently–often believing Vows to be the culmination of promises, oaths, covenants, and kinship.
Put simply, they are the culmination of an agreement between two parties. In exchange for the ability to use the power called Yism, a Yriah must complete the Vow they have pledged, lest they suffer punishment.
Nael, a young orphan boy–must strive to understand what a Vow truly is, while striving to understand why he was chosen to uphold The Evergreen Vow as its Yriah.
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Before a fledgeling can officially call themselves a true Yriah, one must first undertake a Vow. Each of Antoria's inhabitants perceive them differently–often believing Vows to be the culmination of promises, oaths, covenants, and kinship.
Put simply, they are the culmination of an agreement between two parties. In exchange for the ability to use the power called Yism, a Yriah must complete the Vow they have pledged, lest they suffer punishment.
Nael, a young orphan boy–must strive to understand what a Vow truly is, while striving to understand why he was chosen to uphold The Evergreen Vow as its Yriah.
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